S.Jagathsimhan Nair Poet Personification

A Summer Evening 1

A summer evening

The senile sun still
burned us with the foul intent 
Of its mid day  rage
But, lacking in bite, gave in
Quickly to the taunts of breeze.

It tottered about
In the beach, ran its weak hands
Over wheat fields and
Rested awhile atop the
Banyan’s crown and went to sleep.

8th Dec 12.
Form: Personification in TANKA ( Sylls: 5-7-5-7-7)

By S.Jagathsimhan Nair
For: Giorgio's 'Impress me-3'
Motif: Nature

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Dr.Ram Mehta February 9, 2014 at 7:18 AM Wonderful piece of a poem, congrats on the win, nair

Anne-Lise Andresen February 7, 2014 at 7:50 PM Winner List: Impress me III! (Old / New) Sponsored by: Giorgio V. are posted and I will: Congratulate you with your winning poem,Jag !!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Len Gasun May 23, 2013 at 10:38 PM Big congratulations on your awesome win and great write my dear friend Jag! I love it and so enjoyed! Thanks a lot for sharing! love and hugs, Leonora

John Posey May 22, 2013 at 2:49 PM Well done... Congrats on your win.... Jake

Seosamh De Burca May 22, 2013 at 12:52 PM Congrats on your win.

Poet Destroyer A May 22, 2013 at 9:07 AM Jag, CONGRATULATIONS!!! :-) thank you for the wonderful nature poem... Luv~ Luv~ LINDA

Charlotte Puddifoot January 8, 2013 at 6:26 AM some stunning images, alliteration and great combination of tanka and personification, a belated congrats for this winning poem and a happy new year to you! :)

Debbie Guzzi January 6, 2013 at 6:13 PM Nice to read your write this eve. You sure can write personification ;)Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Gwendolen Song December 26, 2012 at 8:40 AM YIPPeeeee!!! Good job with this one! :)

Andrea Dietrich December 25, 2012 at 7:45 PM Jag, this is probably the best poem I have read here all night. BIG congrats. I would have put this way at the top. A FAVE on this one.

Poet Destroyer A December 24, 2012 at 5:42 AM Good morning, Jag,, A nice warm congratulations in Susan's "any new 12 Line Poem" Wishing you the best holidays to come. Merry Christmas and a happy new year. Love~LINDA

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl December 23, 2012 at 1:38 PM Congratulations on your winning spot Jag, this is a fantastic write xx

Gwendolen Song December 22, 2012 at 9:48 AM This one is my favorite of yours thus far...wow, u sure gave the sun an attitude with its "foul intent" and then showed its fatigue only to rest in a most wonderful setting....great personifying! It's a form your should do more of! Off to read some more..............

Cynthia Alvez December 13, 2012 at 3:45 AM Lovely...I say! Cynthia 5:43 a.m. EST

Susan Palli December 13, 2012 at 1:27 AM Loved it!

Debbie Guzzi December 10, 2012 at 2:36 PM There's soome great writes getting done for this contest! YOURS is one of them. Light & Love

Juli- Michelle December 8, 2012 at 10:13 PM some irony in the writing of a summer evening amidst december, alas i enjoyed it! thanks for sharing. -JuliMichelle

Sara Kendrick December 8, 2012 at 12:26 PM I really like this one..Very good personification..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by..Your kind review was uplifting...Sara

Michael J. Falotico December 8, 2012 at 12:05 PM So nice what you have written here... enjoyed Michael

Harry Horsman December 8, 2012 at 7:49 AM this is wonderful Jag...

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl December 8, 2012 at 7:22 AM All the best in the contest Jag, it should do well x

Anne-Lise Andresen December 8, 2012 at 6:58 AM Well done for this Tanka contest, Jag - Good luck, hope you win! - - Wishing you a relaxed weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)