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A Summer Evening 1

A summer evening The senile sun still burned us with the foul intent Of its mid day rage But, lacking in bite, gave in Quickly to the taunts of breeze. It tottered about In the beach, ran its weak hands Over wheat fields and Rested awhile atop the Banyan’s crown and went to sleep. 8th Dec 12. Form: Personification in TANKA ( Sylls: 5-7-5-7-7) By S.Jagathsimhan Nair For: Giorgio's 'Impress me-3' Motif: Nature

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Date: 2/9/2014 7:18:00 AM
Wonderful piece of a poem, congrats on the win, nair
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Date: 2/7/2014 7:50:00 PM
Winner List: Impress me III! (Old / New) Sponsored by: Giorgio V. are posted and I will: Congratulate you with your winning poem,Jag !!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/23/2013 10:38:00 PM
Big congratulations on your awesome win and great write my dear friend Jag! I love it and so enjoyed! Thanks a lot for sharing! love and hugs, Leonora
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Date: 5/22/2013 2:49:00 PM
Well done... Congrats on your win.... Jake
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Date: 5/22/2013 12:52:00 PM
Congrats on your win.
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Date: 5/22/2013 9:07:00 AM
Jag, CONGRATULATIONS!!! :-) thank you for the wonderful nature poem... Luv~ Luv~ LINDA
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Date: 1/8/2013 6:26:00 AM
some stunning images, alliteration and great combination of tanka and personification, a belated congrats for this winning poem and a happy new year to you! :)
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Date: 1/6/2013 6:13:00 PM
Nice to read your write this eve. You sure can write personification ;)Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 12/26/2012 8:40:00 AM
YIPPeeeee!!! Good job with this one! :)
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Date: 12/25/2012 7:45:00 PM
Jag, this is probably the best poem I have read here all night. BIG congrats. I would have put this way at the top. A FAVE on this one.
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Date: 12/24/2012 5:42:00 AM
Good morning, Jag,, A nice warm congratulations in Susan's "any new 12 Line Poem" Wishing you the best holidays to come. Merry Christmas and a happy new year. Love~LINDA
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Date: 12/23/2012 1:38:00 PM
Congratulations on your winning spot Jag, this is a fantastic write xx
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Date: 12/22/2012 9:48:00 AM
This one is my favorite of yours thus far...wow, u sure gave the sun an attitude with its "foul intent" and then showed its fatigue only to rest in a most wonderful setting....great personifying! It's a form your should do more of! Off to read some more..............
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Date: 12/13/2012 3:45:00 AM
Lovely...I say! Cynthia 5:43 a.m. EST
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Date: 12/13/2012 1:27:00 AM
Loved it!
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Date: 12/10/2012 2:36:00 PM
There's soome great writes getting done for this contest! YOURS is one of them. Light & Love
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Date: 12/8/2012 10:13:00 PM
some irony in the writing of a summer evening amidst december, alas i enjoyed it! thanks for sharing. -JuliMichelle
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Date: 12/8/2012 12:26:00 PM
I really like this one..Very good personification..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by..Your kind review was uplifting...Sara
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Date: 12/8/2012 12:05:00 PM
So nice what you have written here... enjoyed Michael
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Date: 12/8/2012 7:49:00 AM
this is wonderful Jag...
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Date: 12/8/2012 7:22:00 AM
All the best in the contest Jag, it should do well x
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Date: 12/8/2012 6:58:00 AM
Well done for this Tanka contest, Jag - Good luck, hope you win! - - Wishing you a relaxed weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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