A Stark Naked Pause

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concerned about being upstaged
the glorious blue tinted rock
negotiated 
sent in the puffy white wisps 
to cover the vibrant coloured evergreens

the brown field in the foreground
felt offended
wondering out loud 
"what about me?"
then added "beauty you know is..."
but never bothered to finish the cliché.

for my part
i was more interested
in what the mountain had traded the clouds
what could it possibly have offered?


September 23 2016

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/14/2017 8:38:00 AM

I don't think the mountain could offer the clouds anything. They are shape shifters, they move with the wind, show their anger with a storm, and then emit a rainbow that's stills the breath, as when the sun sets and rises absorbing its colors. I love this poem Armand! A Fave! : )

Joe Maverick

Date: 2/11/2017 9:55:00 AM

I really like the way you have opened up your imagination here Maurice, I know the feeling that sometimes we can feel a sentient emenation from the creation around us.'

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/7/2016 6:18:00 AM

I too want to know what was offered....lol

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/7/2016 6:17:00 AM

If I can make one person smile today, it would be you. The reason I don't come around, is because I'm afraid to be my natural self around you. However, right now that special someone inside me is dead, gone, or maybe asleep. That's why I tiptoe around you, because you might wake here .. just saying .. my poetic life misses you....Linda

Paul Callus

Date: 9/26/2016 10:09:00 AM

From the initial offering of lovely imagery, you move on to momentary musing, till you arrive at a superb ending. Excellent, Armand! 777+ Regards // paul

Pashang Salehi

Date: 9/25/2016 11:24:00 PM

Clearly stunning......

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/24/2016 5:16:00 PM

so good to see a brilliant new post by you, Armand. This was very enjoyable! Clever too. SEVEN

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/24/2016 12:36:00 PM

Hi Armand, I'm with Jan, the title alone caught my attention. But as I began to read I saw a stunning piece unfold before eyes. A Big seven:-) Alexis