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a smashing success

a smashing success -
diamonds and emeralds
in the jaws of thieves
left to sweep up shards of glass
eyes wet and red as rubies

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Christina Bowring

December 18, 2023 at 1:46 PM

Such a great Tanka dear Kim and very clever. Clever title too. Great imagery and artistic chosen words. You have captured the scene so well with the use of gems. Really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing. Wishing you a wonderful, jolly Christmas. Hugs and smiles :):)

Kim Rodrigues

December 18, 2023 at 5:03 PM

Merry Christmas! Thank you!

Sotto Poet

December 18, 2023 at 6:04 AM

The tale's evocative imagery carries a bittersweet elegance, simultaneously conveying sorrow and captivating beauty. Wishing you a joyous Christmas and a prosperous New Year. Warm Hugs.

Kim Rodrigues

December 18, 2023 at 5:03 PM

Back at you! Thank you so much, Lasaad!

Mike Gentile

December 18, 2023 at 4:27 AM

Kim, the images created are so sad in the story they convey and yet still so beautiful! I think this is so very well done!! A Happy Monday xxoo

Kim Rodrigues

December 18, 2023 at 5:02 PM

Thank you, Mike!

Eve Roper

December 17, 2023 at 9:33 PM

a smashing success is the truth :'( Well said my friend. May you and your family have a wonderful Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year. Hugs eve

Kim Rodrigues

December 18, 2023 at 5:02 PM

Same to you and yours! Thank you, Eve!

Paige Hind

December 16, 2023 at 1:15 PM

This said a lot- in little words. :) Enjoyed!!!

Kim Rodrigues

December 17, 2023 at 6:42 PM

Thank you, Paige! I love using succinct imagery and words! God bless!

Hiya Sharma

December 14, 2023 at 10:39 PM

Oh my, this tanka is bejeweled with such elegant use of gemstones whilst creating a poignant image when one's treasury things are stolen... Those last two lines are very impactful dear Kim.. I absolutely love this tanka, so creatively done within such few words!

Kim Rodrigues

December 17, 2023 at 6:41 PM

Thank you so much, Hiya!

Duke Beaufort

December 13, 2023 at 6:20 PM

I particularly like the last line. The sorrow we face when someone takes something we appreciate using force and theft. It helps me remember that material things are not as important as the spiritual feelings we have toward each other. Thanks for the moment of reflection.

Kim Rodrigues

December 17, 2023 at 6:40 PM

Thank you, Duke! Glad this brought a moment of reflection!