Rita A. Simmonds Poet Free verse

A Second Stream

Our earthly love
completed its course.
What started from
a sudden spring
rushed
eroding land
and loose rock
straightening the way
with force.
It could have gone much smoother
had I known upstream
what I know
down:
Gravity
takes care of everything,
though the damage
is part of the flow.
I thought all would end
in a trickle,
but you left me here
wading.
 
March 5, 2017
for Open Poetry Contest

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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders March 15, 2017 at 12:44 AM Wow, amazing write, Rita! Big congrats to you!! Hugs, Rhonda Rita A. Simmonds March 30, 2017 at 11:52 AM Thank you, Rhonda!

Doug Vinson March 15, 2017 at 12:25 AM Right on, Rita, good stuff indeed! : ) Rita A. Simmonds March 30, 2017 at 11:52 AM Thank you!

John Lawless March 14, 2017 at 9:01 AM Oh Rita, this has left the muse spinning in an attempt to decipher its many tributaries....congrats on your contest placement. Rita A. Simmonds March 14, 2017 at 10:00 AM Thank you, John!

Charlie Smith March 13, 2017 at 12:43 PM Very well done Rita, congratulations... Rita A. Simmonds March 14, 2017 at 10:01 AM Thank you, Charlie!

Agnes Krampe March 12, 2017 at 5:14 PM Great metaphor! Congrats on your win, Rita. Rita A. Simmonds March 14, 2017 at 10:01 AM Thank you!

Kim Rodrigues March 12, 2017 at 5:04 PM Wow, Rita! ...had I known upstream what I know down! Congrats! Rita A. Simmonds March 14, 2017 at 10:00 AM Thank you, Kim!

Deborah Burch March 12, 2017 at 3:32 PM Congratulations Rita!! Beautiful and very well done!! Big Hugggs deb. Rita A. Simmonds March 12, 2017 at 3:37 PM Thank you!

Charlotte Puddifoot March 12, 2017 at 3:32 PM such an affecting and effective piece, i just loved this from the first time i read it; succinct and well written (little typo on lose/loose?) - congrats on your win in my contest! Rita A. Simmonds March 12, 2017 at 3:37 PM Thanks, Charlotte!

CayCay Godwin March 5, 2017 at 10:34 PM If. If only we knew what were up stream. I really like the delivery and the message, both blend as a great read. Good luck ... CayCay Rita A. Simmonds March 6, 2017 at 12:03 PM Thank you, CCJ!

Probir Gupta March 5, 2017 at 10:05 PM A poem to read, visualise, think, smile and enjoy ... Very nice ... Most of us have to wade ... Rita A. Simmonds March 6, 2017 at 12:04 PM Thank you, Probir!