A Second Stream

Our earthly love
completed its course.
What started from
a sudden spring
rushed
eroding land
and loose rock
straightening the way
with force.
It could have gone much smoother
had I known upstream
what I know
down:
Gravity
takes care of everything,
though the damage
is part of the flow.
I thought all would end
in a trickle,
but you left me here
wading.
 
March 5, 2017
for Open Poetry Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 3/15/2017 12:44:00 AM
Wow, amazing write, Rita! Big congrats to you!! Hugs, Rhonda
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 3/30/2017 11:52:00 AM
Thank you, Rhonda!
Date: 3/15/2017 12:25:00 AM
Right on, Rita, good stuff indeed! : )
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 3/30/2017 11:52:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 3/14/2017 9:01:00 AM
Oh Rita, this has left the muse spinning in an attempt to decipher its many tributaries....congrats on your contest placement.
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 3/14/2017 10:00:00 AM
Thank you, John!
Date: 3/13/2017 12:43:00 PM
Very well done Rita, congratulations...
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 3/14/2017 10:01:00 AM
Thank you, Charlie!
Date: 3/12/2017 5:14:00 PM
Great metaphor! Congrats on your win, Rita.
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 3/14/2017 10:01:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 3/12/2017 5:04:00 PM
Wow, Rita! ...had I known upstream what I know down! Congrats!
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 3/14/2017 10:00:00 AM
Thank you, Kim!
Date: 3/12/2017 3:32:00 PM
Congratulations Rita!! Beautiful and very well done!! Big Hugggs deb.
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 3/12/2017 3:37:00 PM
Thank you!
Date: 3/12/2017 3:32:00 PM
such an affecting and effective piece, i just loved this from the first time i read it; succinct and well written (little typo on lose/loose?) - congrats on your win in my contest!
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 3/12/2017 3:37:00 PM
Thanks, Charlotte!
Date: 3/5/2017 10:34:00 PM
If. If only we knew what were up stream. I really like the delivery and the message, both blend as a great read. Good luck ... CayCay
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 3/6/2017 12:03:00 PM
Thank you, CCJ!
Date: 3/5/2017 10:05:00 PM
A poem to read, visualise, think, smile and enjoy ... Very nice ... Most of us have to wade ...
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 3/6/2017 12:04:00 PM
Thank you, Probir!
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