A River Alouette

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Tumbling and rushing
Grumbling and gushing
Through reeds and over great rocks
Swelling and swaying
Dancing and playing 
Mid nettles thistles and docks

But down the low glen
Where moor turns to fen
The river slows her fast pace
And there in the mire
She loses her fire
Yields and abandons the race

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30/08/14
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Nance Avatar
September 15, 2014 at 9:18 PM
This does have a feel of a child's song, a lovely and well done song of your words, congrats on your contest win :)
Meier-Hans Avatar
September 15, 2014 at 1:41 PM
Very beautifully done Margaret. Congratulations on your win.
Allison Avatar
September 15, 2014 at 1:11 PM
wonderful imagery Margaret congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
September 15, 2014 at 8:37 AM
Dear Margaret, the only thing this one does not have is the correct meter (on third syllable of each line) That said, it was perfect in EVERY other way. In fact, I contemplated giving it first. I just love how you took the river through its course until that last great line! Congratulations in my contest. (By the way, the meter you DID use really went well with your lines!)
Foster Avatar
September 15, 2014 at 9:07 AM
Sorry about that, guess I didn't pay enough attention to the form. Think it is a new one for me. Cheers.
Gorelick Avatar
September 15, 2014 at 7:31 AM
Now, you should be proud..I just love this one and will look for you another list..you write beautifully. congrats. BG
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