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A Rattling Rhyme

O, Basilisk keeping across the unsinkable surface of water, desperately fleeing the terrible hunger of monstrously ravenous mouths, supported by ripples of light, as adrenaline, faith and delight appear to allow the impossible task of traversing the river of night, as the bluegills below the remarkable sight of a lizard escaping a death of forsaken repose effervesce with a watery awe, is an ingenuous talent as yours unremittingly earned? Aug 28, '18

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Date: 8/31/2018 1:00:00 PM
Congratulations on this winning piece superbly done! : )
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Date: 8/30/2018 1:54:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Unique. Well done.
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Date: 8/29/2018 6:47:00 AM
This is certainly unusual and worthy of several reads, very clever, Jack. Well done! regards, Viv
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Date: 8/28/2018 4:09:00 PM
This is really unusual Jack and so satisfying to read several times. I love the way it hisses along - you’ve done something really interesting with the rhythm I asked for and introduced some venom to my winners’ list! Congratulations on your well-earned place!
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Jack Webster
Date: 8/28/2018 5:36:00 PM
Thanks, Nina. I guess I took your request for anapestic and dactylic meter of a breathless length too literally. It was still fun to write though. I'll know not to be so strict to the rules next time. Really enjoyed this challenge. Glad you enjoyed (though I'm pretty sure basilisks aren't poisonous :D ).