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A Ramshackle Faith

A ramshackle faith unattended lies withering on vines thirsting for the truth of parched memory Doubtless sparrows mocking the mind chirp happily in denial moments pass lost in time’s endless search for then is now lost ©12/10/2019 Pick A Title, Vol 12 – Diminished Hexaverse – Poetry Contest Edward Ibeh - sponsor

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/12/2020 1:34:00 PM

Just saw your reply to me. Yes, don't you live it when the poem carries YOU to the end?? For me, this one was tops. Congrats on your win.

Lu Loo

Date: 1/11/2020 2:58:00 PM

wow those last 3 lines. amazing poem, filled with great metaphors. sadly beautiful, congrats dear John x:-)-luloo

John Lawless
Date: 1/12/2020 12:12:00 PM

Thanks luloo

Edward Ibeh

Date: 1/11/2020 7:48:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in my contest, John:-) Fabulous poem! Love the second stanza!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/13/2019 6:49:00 PM

oooh, that is so good, John. I especially like where you TOOK it, which is so important in a form like this one. I was drawn to that theme's title as well. If I do it, It will be nothing like yours, because I see my personal ramshackle faith in a very different way. This one you did I think is how many would relate to it!

John Lawless
Date: 1/12/2020 12:09:00 PM

ITs more where the theme took me Andrea

Ann Foster

Date: 12/12/2019 9:14:00 AM

Wow.. this is a fav for me... I get it from beginning to end.. and then read it again... before memorizing...

John Lawless
Date: 12/13/2019 1:40:00 PM

thank you for the "wow"....glad it found a place in you to reside

Na Na

Date: 12/10/2019 3:13:00 PM

Well done John. I just learned hex yesterday. So I entered mine in the contest. It seemed not too hard. You made it look easy. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest

John Lawless
Date: 12/13/2019 1:39:00 PM

Looks can be deceiving....these little devils give we the willies.