Jannie Breedt Poet Free verse

A Promise To My Mother

You required from us no elegy
So I promise in this paragraph
My poems become your epitaph
From all the years of reading youve done
Ive become your writing son
And today  I am almost old
I will write it into solid gold
Your blood is the fluid in my inky pen
The spirit of the ages
I will spill on these pages
Until one day I will see you again

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Jan Allison November 17, 2016 at 3:19 AM A lovely tribute to your mother... I only recently discovered my maternal grandmother wrote poetry as do my elderly aunt and uncle. My mother also wrote but I have never seen her poems... now I know it's in my blood it just took my husband's cancer surgery in 2013 to unleash this creativity in me. :-) hugs Jan xx7 Jannie Breedt November 17, 2016 at 7:52 AM O Jan I am much pleased by your visit being from an eminent poet as yourself. Isnt it strange how it took a shock to unleash our creativity. Mine was locked up till doomsday until I woke up with a jolt. My wish for you is that you can even exceed your previous work. Thanks for the visit

Carol B. October 29, 2016 at 12:32 AM Absolutely beautiful :) Jannie Breedt October 29, 2016 at 2:45 AM Hi Carol. Thank you and welcome.

Robert Warlov September 26, 2016 at 11:09 PM I disagree with Keith. "Inky pen" struck me like Shakespeare. Inky is the verb! -- I get the contrast between your mother: "Solid Gold", and you, wielder of an "inky pen". That one word/phrase illuminates the image. Jannie Breedt October 3, 2016 at 5:33 AM Hi Robert, thanks for being a comrade in the trenches.

Kelly Deschler September 23, 2016 at 2:07 PM A tender, heartfelt and beautiful dedication to your Mother... Nice, smoothly flowing lines here, Jannie. Well done! Jannie Breedt October 3, 2016 at 5:27 AM Hi again Kelly. Much oblidged thank you

Tim Smith September 17, 2016 at 11:30 AM A really sweet dedication Jannie...welcome to the soup Jannie Breedt October 3, 2016 at 5:25 AM Hey Tim. I have been around a while but thanks

Keith Logan September 17, 2016 at 7:23 AM Isn't it a shame this site does not allow editing responses. Jannie Breedt September 17, 2016 at 9:51 AM Hi Keith oo but it does. Thankyou for egaging with my writes. I will amend them soon when I can buy some data but the power has been off since yesterday

Keith Logan September 17, 2016 at 7:18 AM A really good epitaph for your mother. Just a couple of tweaks I suggest: And today as I am almost old Your blood is the fluid in pen Until the day I see you again Jannie Breedt September 17, 2016 at 9:53 AM Thank you I will be sure to tweak you out too Keith Logan September 17, 2016 at 7:20 AM I missed out "my" before inky pen

Sunita U.D Palawon September 17, 2016 at 6:26 AM Wonderful tribute to your mother whose also been your inspiration. ALL THE BEST. Sunita Jannie Breedt October 3, 2016 at 5:23 AM Hi Sunita. I also viaited your page and left comments. Thank you so much

Probir Gupta September 17, 2016 at 5:38 AM Very fond imagination blended with warm feeling generating the poem ... nice ... Jannie Breedt September 17, 2016 at 9:54 AM Once again thank you Probhir for your gracious visit. Have a blessed weekend