A Place Not Meant To Be: 08

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Poetic Form: Crown of Sonnets: Italian or Petrachan

Inspired: 2024 March 21

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#8: Time's Up Renewed, a second, their forevermore, a bobbing pin rethreads all in red threads, the pedals are pressed up and down the floor, the bobbing pin threads in and out all reds. The Kids and Mom in Kress's Department Store, Dad is somewhere eating candied popcorn, Kids are reading comics at the bookstore, Mom looking at patterned clothes to adorn, The store is not in business, now a school, Pattern clothes take time, best buy off the shelf, The bookstore is closed and comics a-tool, Sewing at home is passe like Santa's elf, Be a dog--cause cats only have nine lives, Do the numbers--dogs don't count--just survives!

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 3/21/2024 3:58:00 PM

Your poem touched me in a nostalgic sort of way...time is up metaphorically for this poetess. I remember Kress's Dept. Store, comic books, homemade clothes made from patterns...and they did take time. I believe Sewing at home is truly passe as are many things.I lived in a simpler, less chatoic time and am grateful for it. I enjoyed your poem Have a great evening, Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 3/21/2024 4:44:00 PM

Nostalgia, that's the ticket, Sara, uplifting--my contest choice with Constance--thanks, my friend. Aloha, William

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/21/2024 11:39:00 AM

I enjoyed reading this creative write. "Good Luck" Have blessed day writing away.................

Hilo Poet
Date: 3/21/2024 12:31:00 PM

Thanks, Paula. A blessed day to you, Aloha, William