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June 10, 2024, placed 14th in Craig Cornish's Empty Room Contest

August 14, 2025, entered in Mark Toney's 2025 Poetry Marathon Mile 7
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A Natural Emptiness

The closet, once crammed with the styles of youth,
holds not so much as a coat hanger.
Dents in the carpet are the only evidence
that a bed, dresser, and nightstand filled the room.
The frilly window dressings and wall art are gone. The truth
weighs heavily on my heart; my sense of loss is intense
as I gaze through tears at the emptiness.

Five years ago, just down the hall, I stood in a room
stripped bare of furniture, clothing, and all hints 
of the masculinity that had thrived there. The gloom
set in as I visualized the weight-lifting equipment 
and the “man cave” corner that was always messy.
I reminisced and pondered where the time went.

My sentiments may resonate with others
who revisit vacant spaces—the fathers and mothers
now categorized as empty-nesters, who must accept
the reality that vacant rooms are part of the 
natural scheme of things; they are survivable.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Ashley Avatar
June 11, 2024 at 6:31 PM
Dear Janice, indeed, your poem resonates with this empty-nester. Your poem expresses parental nostalgia and yearning with potent, wistful beauty. Captivating imagery. Congratulations for your win in Craig's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Canerdy Avatar
June 12, 2024 at 6:57 AM
Thanks SO much, Susan. Janice
Dietrich Avatar
June 5, 2024 at 3:37 PM
Such feeling in this one. Great writing here, Janice. Vacant spaces can be eerie too
Canerdy Avatar
June 5, 2024 at 8:23 PM
Thanks so much, Andrea. Janice
Cunningham Avatar
June 4, 2024 at 8:12 AM
It's not until we get older that it hits us Janice, all that's left is an empty shell and memories. Hope you're keeping well. Tom
Canerdy Avatar
June 4, 2024 at 11:51 AM
So true, Tom. I've been an empty nester for 22 years, yet on some days NOW, the fact hits harder than when she left~~to get married. THANKS. Janice
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