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Kissed by the passing breeze of awakenng Contest ~ Sponsor: John Lawless

July 16, 2023

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It was the moment sepia bloomed into color. I felt it in my fingertips as a tingling sensation, like the warmth of the sun when it touched my skin and allowed a gentle breeze to awaken within me something that had caught me completely unaware. There was a melody drifting on the wind. I shared its lyrics with my heart but no one else, afraid I'd misread what I'd seen in his eyes, and unsure that somehow, I had misconstrued what the gentle zephyr was conveying to me. There were butterflies waltzing inside of me, dancing with intense yearning that I wanted to explore. It filled my mind and body until I could hardly breathe. At sixteen, I was ready to walk across that threshold between adolescence and what was on the other side. A smile brushed my lips each time I said his name.

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Akanksha Ayantika

Date: 8/8/2023 5:32:00 AM

Congratulations! Your poem is a delight to read

Lin Lane
Date: 8/8/2023 5:54:00 AM

Thanks so very much for your kind thoughts, Akanksha.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 8/8/2023 2:54:00 AM

Trembling with light, soft and stirring, erasing all the dark that falls on the night, portraying a joy far reaching, ever assuring, a beauty beyond hopeful... a gem for sure, Congrats my friend, Love, Gina

Lin Lane
Date: 8/8/2023 5:54:00 AM

Thanks for such wonderful remarks, Gina as well as for the lines you found most to your liking. Hugs.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/7/2023 5:20:00 PM

Lin, back with congratulations on your win with this sublime, and tender, love song. Your "dancing butterflies," "sepia" blooming, are just two of your amazing images! Young love so wonderfully expressed - "ready to walk across that threshold." Wonderful expression! What a wonderful joy to share the podium with you! Blessings to you!

Lin Lane
Date: 8/8/2023 5:53:00 AM

With pleasure do I always welcome the compliments of your poetic reviews, Sam. When one falls in love again, no matter at what age, butterflies dance and the world is ablaze in colors. Thank you for so many kudos.

John Lawless

Date: 8/7/2023 4:46:00 PM

Ah, the blushing bliss of young lovers .. heart throbs, heart beats and that final line.....a memory one should never forget.

Lin Lane
Date: 8/7/2023 5:03:00 PM

I’m truly delighted with your comments and the placement you’ve awarded it in your contest. Thanks ever so much and hugs, John.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/20/2023 12:00:00 PM

Lin, as always your words literally float from the page into my heart! Moments of pure a-ha! Beautifully written. Best wishes for the contest. Blessings my friend. Here's to blissful a-ha moments!

Lin Lane
Date: 8/7/2023 5:01:00 PM

Oh Sam, forgive me for not responding to your wonderfully supportive comments on this poem. I saw it had received a comment and found your comment along with John’s. Now I see that he has awarded both of us first place wins in his contest. Sooo nice for both of us! Thanks very much.

David Kavanagh

Date: 7/17/2023 12:28:00 PM

A delicate yet ardent interpretation of readiness to explore one’s adolescent desires, brilliantly worded Lin, you capture the moment as if happened only yesterday, great one for the contest, cheers David

Lin Lane
Date: 7/17/2023 1:26:00 PM

It seems like yesterday, David, but not as an adolescent. How many such moments of new love can we have? I’ll not put a limit on such beautiful beginnings. I’m glad you’re back. Cheers!

Paul Bell

Date: 7/17/2023 5:59:00 AM

Was he a starter for ten, or the beginning of the end?

Lin Lane
Date: 7/17/2023 6:04:00 AM

He was the beginning that has no end. Thanks for commenting, Paul.

Paul Willason

Date: 7/16/2023 8:03:00 PM

Lin, a beautiful poem, capturing that illusive feeling of transition, tipping on a moment, infused with the wellings of youth...very skillfully put together but above all, charged with life ! O youth, how wonderful, how passion torn, how longed for....

Lin Lane
Date: 7/17/2023 6:04:00 AM

Hi Paul, Your comments are always in need of being read more than once. I thank you for being able to discern what's not been written, but implied. Merci.

Tania Kitchin

Date: 7/16/2023 12:41:00 PM

Lin, a wonderfully penned romantic poem, a turning point in life when crossing that romantic threshold, a mixture of innocence and lust that feels like love.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/16/2023 3:31:00 PM

I am so pleased with your comments, Tania. Thank you ever so much.

Jay Narain

Date: 7/16/2023 11:59:00 AM

Nice to remember growing days, Nicely penned.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/16/2023 3:31:00 PM

Many thanks for your thoughts, Jay.

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/16/2023 11:25:00 AM

My friend, this is a very brilliantly composed romantic poem! Both colorful and intense in the emotions conveyed to the reader. A fine fav... God bless..

Lin Lane
Date: 7/16/2023 11:55:00 AM

Thank you very much, Robert. There was something in the wind this morning that prompted this one... a renewal of emotions.