A Man's Metal

fatherless husband
loins aching for progeny 
empty wombs await seeding
childless mothers cry
opening soft pocket sighs
stoking the steel thorns rising


Contest: Sedoka Me Any Subject
Poet: Debbie Guzzi
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Phookan Avatar
March 1, 2012 at 7:05 AM
Wow, everytime I read your work, I'm left totally spellbound!!! Congrats Debbie on your fine win in this contest..love, gautami
Bunton Avatar
February 29, 2012 at 4:57 PM
Congratulations!
Merryman Avatar
February 29, 2012 at 3:36 PM
An excellent write, Debbie. Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim
Brown Avatar
February 29, 2012 at 6:59 AM
Congratulations on your win in Russell's "Sedoka Me Any Subject" contest Debbie. Love, Carol
Neels Avatar
February 29, 2012 at 5:27 AM
Debbie, congratulations on your win in Russell's contest :) Wilma
Poet Avatar
February 29, 2012 at 1:31 AM
Congrats Debi on your win.A strong write.Enjoyed the read.
Onclaud Avatar
February 28, 2012 at 10:12 PM
a searing piece that deserves this special award, debbie... i like empty wombs await seedling!.. super congrats! :) huggs
Sweetheart Avatar
February 28, 2012 at 6:54 PM
super congrats Debbie on a dynamic win for this wonderful write in Sedoka contest luv..
Song Avatar
February 28, 2012 at 6:26 PM
Even without the photo this poem is so profound! It makes me feel like finding him and giving him a huge bear hug! Congrats on this winning write, Deb. Your vocabulary and poetic maturity are great to read! Love, Gwendolen
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February 28, 2012 at 5:12 PM
congrats on your win....Sara
Sivey Avatar
February 26, 2012 at 3:55 PM
This is an excellent entry into my contest Debbie. I really enjoyed this write today! I read this poem several times so I can get the full effect of it! I think it a truly magnificent poem! I will be adjusting my poem later tonight so look for an adjustment later! Thanks! Great Work!!
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