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October.2.2023
Love Poem Using Words of Four Letters or Less Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Darla Seely

 

Love is now a feel that cuts thru my vein, It’s a wave that runs down to the core and more. I feel I am full only when you are near. If you go far from me, I will feel so sore. I want you to know that I love you more than all. You beam as the fair moon in my sky. Know that you are the only one I love. Come down, don’t stay like a star up so high. I will make a home just for you and me. And set up all that will suit your whim, Wrap you up in a feel, so pure, lush, and warm, Like a swan in the lake of joy, I shall make you swim. I love you in a way that none can beat. My love for you is deep, a love you will feel. My body, mind, and soul I give you free and full, And my warm care that can calm, mend, and heal. When you are with me, I long to hold your hand. My lips burn for a kiss when no one is near. You wake the love buds in me that I fail to tame. You are the song I wish to hear and the load I wish to bear.

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Date: 10/2/2023 8:19:00 PM
Your love poem conveys its sincere, expressive theme through the use of very descriptive figures of speech~~using words of four letters or fewer! Great job, Valsa. Janice
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Date: 10/2/2023 8:00:00 PM
Beautiful poem of true love , thanks for sharing your amazing gift with us all in giving true guidance into a peaceful and loving life
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Date: 10/2/2023 1:34:00 PM
such a beautiful poem--a love song that resonated with me. The last line embodies how I feel about my hubby. An outstanding creation, Valsa. Am faving it, Sara
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Date: 10/2/2023 10:26:00 AM
How romantic in small words, GL in contest.
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Date: 10/2/2023 8:23:00 AM
Great job making small words poetic. I found one word with over 4 letters: stray. Good luck. Very well done
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Valsa George
Date: 10/2/2023 7:01:00 PM
Thank you Andrea for pointing out the five letter word. I have changed it. :) ;0
Date: 10/2/2023 7:04:00 AM
You’ve nailed it! Really! And you’ve rhymed too how clever. I just posted my take for this too and i must admit it was so hard really, using just four words was challenging. But yours flow seamlessly and with so much love, romantically beaming like the moon! How touching and soulful is this poem. I especially love the way you’ve written “ ill make a home for you” what more can love do or make one feel! “ you are the song i wish to hear” love that too, and that ending hits home! Well expressed.
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Date: 10/2/2023 5:53:00 AM
Your writing skillfully captures the very soul of Love Valsa. Your poem is a work of art, adorned with a keen perception of love and its inherent beauty. The mere presence of your beloved intensifies its romantic allure, rendering it a truly magnificent love poem.
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Date: 10/2/2023 2:25:00 AM
Woah, this form of using only 4 letter words or less is definitely challenging and you've nailed it, dear poetess! I love how delicately you've woven smooth imageries and heartfelt emotions, scintillating in the beautiful embroidery of your lines.. So much you've conveyed about yearning for a love so pure and how a person can become our whole world..Also, I adore so many lines here "Wrap you up in a feel, so pure, lush, and warm, Like a swan in the lake of joy, I shall make you swim" So precious
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/2/2023 2:25:00 AM
Best of luck for the contest, sending you so much love :)
Date: 10/2/2023 2:19:00 AM
The proximity of the person you love will increase its romantic stance. A wonderful love poem, dear Valsa. Blessings.
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Date: 10/2/2023 2:00:00 AM
Wonderful Valsa - this short word one was tricky but I see you have aced it <3
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