A Look Inside

I came as an unaffected statue
Halloween depiction depicting everything
vaguely-leaving margins for misinterpretations
like hieroglyphics deciphered by illiterates
scawling crayon scratch book reports

Walk in these shoes
Feel the pavement scrape through openings worn through souls
and feel the contours of the Earth ravaging
           ~merciless~
Take the reigns of this chariot
rambling around on undiscernable tracks often
backwards-hobbling humbly
numbly picking up pieces from a patchwork jigsaw
picture possesing voids in the most beautiful places

Climb this tree and know the shaky footfall limbs
sprawl like weeping willow tendrils on my fathers branch
bare and abandoned like locusts came, fed, and fled
watch the forest flourish and realize
this tree is flawed yet resilient
rooted in the strength of adversity

Stethoscope this heart and enjoy the offbeat beat
thumping in uneven peak and valley arrythmia
loving deeply and loved shallow, coldly
berating every executioner who killed
my adoration quotient with dull unfeeling axes
Leaving tides turned, churning me to hurt
Vengefully....Senselessly
Leaving no paths passing me passively
~~passion is my blessing and curse

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 5/11/2009 4:18:00 PM
I love this. Every line is just so jam-packed... My favorites are probably the play on "souls" in the second stanza and the contrasts in the last stanza: "loving deeply and loved shallow. " =( so sad... and so beautiful.
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Date: 5/10/2009 9:37:00 PM
Steve you are a pleasure to read my friend. The imagery is too powerful for words. The last stanza is a genuine kick in the gut. -Jason
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Date: 5/9/2009 9:12:00 AM
Hi Steve.... remarkable writing... the phrasing, the imagery outstanding , first stanza... pure genius. kudos my firend kudos !
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Date: 5/8/2009 10:19:00 AM
It must be me, I am so off lately, but Steve as outstanding a write as this is, it sure shows you have been through great emotional pain. Your resilience will pay off, I just know it, as you obviously do. Wishing you the love and peace you seek, and no I am not imagining you in that way, silly, from your soup mail. Anywho - awesome does it Sir Steve. Your poetry rocks the universe. Love, Shar
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Date: 5/8/2009 4:32:00 AM
This is a rocking write brother Steve..you do your thing from another hemisphere..making my mind do the dance as I read your work...I jhust know you write all of this over a pint and a chalice..light it up..LOL
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Date: 5/8/2009 2:16:00 AM
Hello my new facebook buddy, wazzup? LOVE the last stanza - the whole poem moves. it should be set to a backbone beat, hip hop, yo! Come on now, set this baby in motion! Awesome work! Love, Kristin
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Date: 5/7/2009 9:33:00 PM
This is an astounding power piece Steve! Passion drives the pen and produces powerhouses like this one! Thank you for kind comments always, aprpeciated.
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Date: 5/7/2009 9:07:00 PM
Compelling thoughts, Steve. Indeed, like you, "passion is my blessing and curse." Artists feel things so deeply, it can cause both great joy and tremendous sorrw. How wise you are to remain "rooted in the strength of adversity." An absolutely brilliant poem! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/7/2009 8:57:00 PM
Steve outstanding penmanship in this piece - Very well expressed and very profound in its conclusion - This is a great poem - God Bless, MJ
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