A Lonely Walk

Alone I walked on a littered part
A companion I seek on my journey
Saluting me was a weird man afar
Sitting inside an abandoned caravan
Looking tattered in a torn sleeveless 
Haaa! Haaa! Haaa! His laughter continues…
He was eating from a barbaric piece of cake
Hey brother! Whispered the lunatic
At this point restless became my mind
And then I ran into a mud shelter to hide 
A deep breath of relief I took and sat
Resting my back on the primitive cracked wall
Only to hear a strange voice echoing again
Just like the sound of many water dropping
I stood up but behold my legs are heavy
At this time I was weak and weary
I couldn’t help but to give up
For the evil lurked in the darkness
But when I was about to scream!
Mama woke me up from sleep
For I have been dreaming a dream
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Girl48 Avatar
March 18, 2016 at 10:34 PM
I enjoyed reading your poem. Glad it was just a dream.
Kimathi Avatar
March 17, 2016 at 8:41 AM
Greetings David. Congrats for having your piece featured in the Poetry Soup homepage!!! ;-)
Cameron Avatar
March 13, 2016 at 10:52 PM
The descriptive language paints a vivid picture. I could feel the surrealism, reminding me of my own night-dreams. Beautifully written!
Kroll Avatar
March 13, 2016 at 7:46 PM
Paints a nightmarish dream very well. Great imagery--mud shelter I could feel my back leaning against the cracked wall Evil exists but so glad it has a happy
Azike Avatar
March 13, 2016 at 12:52 AM
Awesome you really kept my mind going with you which made it so beautiful which is the idea. Nice
Adeyemo Avatar
March 13, 2016 at 12:58 AM
thanks Osita do you do monologues?
A  Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 9:43 PM
WOW! New and Poem od The day, David, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
Adeyemo Avatar
March 13, 2016 at 1:00 AM
nice hearing from you SKAT, can we work on a project? e mail me @ [email protected]
Rockwell Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 12:08 PM
Congrats on POTD!!
Sergi Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 9:44 AM
Hi David: Congratulations on a beautiful dream poem and the POTD!
Adeyemo Avatar
March 13, 2016 at 1:00 AM
Thanks Ralph i am honored
Davey Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 8:29 AM
It is always nice waking up realizing that it was just a dream, great first post and congrats on POD
Adeyemo Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 7:09 AM
Thanks everyone i am honored that my poem is been selected as the poem of the day...
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 6:48 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful poem being selected as POTD!
Andresen Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 6:03 AM
- A great poem, David - Congratulations on your p.o.t.d. !! - Welcome to Poetry soup - Best wishes and a beautiful weekend // Anne-Lise :)
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