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A Lollipop Day

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A Lollipop Day A swing stalls mid swings kicked dirt strewed a ground a swing seat goes empty a boy whacks away at clung dirt ~~lawn trails a dusty path, Blue jeans stand at attention further treatment closely probed necessitates a full body turn involved mother gives a once over ~~okay liberates eagerness, Parental engagement outlines a day unnoticed enterprises the mischief a fresh face glistens on chrome skewed mouth pose for finger rubs ~~teeth shine on car's trappings, Innocence mounts the vinyl backseat a carlock mercilessly rewrites gravity a body twists and a matchbox car rolls neath a rear window, movement felt ~~a father's voice sits a boy, A mother hearkened locks a seatbelt a town flies pauses, then flies again a mother leaves a father and the boy whose eyes are fascinated by spirals ~~a barber's pole swirls, A squirmish boy enticed to bestilled snip's squints a boy's mirrored face as scissors repeatedly being flexed by a talented barber precise styles ~~a mother's return smiles, A powdery roughhoused brushing thoroughly adds a soothing resolve they wait as a father has his turn then they leave with shorter hair ~~gust cools heads with ease, A mother pays as a family leaves a couple of stops, a few stores later he now finds himself seated on a swing a mother directly relieves a barber's gift ~~back-kick swing lifts, lollipop licks. 2020 August 20

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Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 9/3/2020 2:02:00 PM

Very interesting write! Well, like several strokes of paint and the image emerges! Hopefully will try and have a go! Thanks William!

Hilo Poet
Date: 9/3/2020 2:35:00 PM

I am grateful for your considerations, Krish, stay well and safe my friend, Aloha! William

Anisha Dutta

Date: 9/2/2020 9:37:00 AM

Enjoyed the 'Boy's Day Out. Impressive and interesting narrated in a Poet's pen. Blsings

Hilo Poet
Date: 9/2/2020 10:56:00 AM

Always your kind heart shines, Anisha, stay well and safe my friend, Aloha! William

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 8/28/2020 5:38:00 AM

Impressive, friend. I enjoyed this. God bless you :)

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/28/2020 8:55:00 AM

Thanks, Regina, for your thoughtful assessments, blessings truly, Aloha! William

Bobby May

Date: 8/27/2020 4:54:00 AM

I love this William, awesome my friend!!

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/27/2020 10:02:00 AM

Thanks, Bobby, son lost that matchbox car years ago in a street drainage, Aloha! William

Beata Agustin

Date: 8/26/2020 10:32:00 PM

Thanks for sharing this lovely piece - displaying loving parents-son relationship. Likewise, this exemplifies what your contest requires. God bless you.

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/26/2020 10:56:00 PM

May the Lord shine upon your countenance, Beata, blessings upon you and your household, stay well and safe, Aloha! William

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/20/2020 4:02:00 PM

a day in the life of a boy!! Clever and cute, William!

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/20/2020 4:32:00 PM

Childhood, not too far of a stretch but it sings, Andrea, you have a tremendous soul, stay well and Aloha! William