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A Last Goodbye

Seeking solitude and silence
Birthday dreams are left in tatters
He was kissing another girl

31st December 2014
Jan Allison
Image 1 chosen
Contest 3 x 8 image 
Sponsor Nette Onclaud
Syllables checked using How Many Syllables 8,8,8
~awarded 4th place~

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/15/2015 11:45:00 PM

once again, thank you for the reply...:)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/16/2015 2:32:00 AM

:-) xx Jan xx

Martin Lochner

Date: 1/12/2015 7:53:00 AM

I can relate to that!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/12/2015 7:59:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by Martin:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/11/2015 9:46:00 PM

JAN,, congratulations on your AWESOME win, LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 1/12/2015 1:06:00 AM

Thanks Linda:-) Hugs Jan x

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/11/2015 4:08:00 PM

Congrats on your great winning work..Way to go..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 1/11/2015 4:23:00 PM

Thanks so much Sara:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kelly Deschler

Date: 1/10/2015 6:35:00 PM

So much emotion is expressed in just a few short lines. I really liked your interpretation of image #1. Nicely done! Congrats on the win, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/10/2015 6:41:00 PM

Thanks so much for your lovely coment, I found the image so beautiful - hauntingly sad - so I just went with my emotions. I am so glad you liked my poem Kelly:-) Hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/8/2015 2:20:00 AM

I knew this one would be inthe winners circle. Congrats Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/8/2015 7:51:00 AM

Thanks so much Connie I was delighted with my win:-) Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 1/7/2015 3:53:00 PM

Yay! Grats on your win!!! whoohhooo!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2015 4:05:00 PM

Thanks Cas my sultry friend:-) :-) Hugs jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 1/7/2015 2:36:00 PM

Yours is a stunning write, a huge winner in my eyes. Congratulations on your win!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2015 2:55:00 PM

Thanks so much Armand I am so pleased I got placed - i love this image find it hauntingly sad:-( Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/7/2015 1:38:00 PM

I really liked yours , Jan. Big congrats on the win.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2015 1:45:00 PM

Thanks Andrea i was pleased with my win I adore the picture i find it hauntingly sad:-) Hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 1/7/2015 9:59:00 AM

Hi Jan...it's always lovely to be able to return with Congratulations!! Well done! hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2015 10:38:00 AM

Many thanks Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 1/7/2015 9:53:00 AM

My, what a huge letdown for the poor girl! I think you did an amazing job of filling in the picture. Couldn't be better!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2015 10:37:00 AM

Many thanks Isaiah:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 1/7/2015 9:20:00 AM

Good thinking, good poetry;congrats on the win Jan...huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2015 10:37:00 AM

Many thanks Kayod5:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/7/2015 9:15:00 AM

piercing, beautiful mood of a moment, jan.. thanks for being part of my contest and big congrats

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2015 10:36:00 AM

Thanks Nette i was delighted to be placed:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 1/7/2015 8:52:00 AM

Hi Jan, stopping back to congratulate you on your win! One of my favorites on the list. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2015 10:36:00 AM

Many thanks Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 1/7/2015 8:35:00 AM

Nicely done poem on the theme of the picture, congrats on the win, Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2015 10:35:00 AM

Many thanks Dr Mehta:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 1/7/2015 4:27:00 AM

Ah Jan love this one,, great work n a deserved win! big congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2015 6:39:00 AM

Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) Hugs Jan xx

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 1/7/2015 3:59:00 AM

Congratulations and love from this friend Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2015 6:39:00 AM

Thanks so much Rajat:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 1/5/2015 8:45:00 PM

Beautiful pen Jan! Very dramatic piece my very dear friend. A 7 from me! Best wishes to you in 2015! :)Love and hugs! xxxxx D.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/6/2015 1:20:00 AM

Thanks so much Dorian:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/2/2015 2:28:00 PM

oh, Jan. I really like yours. I chose the same picture as you (just not posted yet) I see another win in your new year!!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/2/2015 2:59:00 PM

I will keep my fingers crossed Andrea but you can never tell how our words are interpreted byt the sponsors - am glad I didnt try humour with this one lol :-) Hugs Jan xx

Kelly Deschler

Date: 1/2/2015 2:03:00 PM

I think all of us can recall a birthday that was ruined in some way. Your poem captures that sadness perfectly... A great interpretation of the image! Very well done, Jan. Good luck in the contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/2/2015 2:13:00 PM

Thanks so much for your lovely comment Kelly I just have to go where my muse takes me and I found the picture so beautiful but hauntingly sad:-) hugs Jan xxx