A Key

a broken heart awaits its somber fate the hands of time have made it beat too weak to find the pulse of love it used to seek it fades within a burdened soul abate then hides the key that frees the chains of weight within a soul where darkness seems to peak it cannot beat in harmony nor speak without the stroke of time to guide its gait a gallant soul i give this gift to you break free these chains that weigh this heart of mine awake from dreams a restless soul to see a heart that beats an endless pulse anew and sees again how fate and love entwine when souls in love through time find ways to be January 1 2020 Open me first poetry contest Sponsored by Craig Cornish

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 1/15/2020 12:47:00 PM

Hi Sandra, Congratulations on your win! Wonderful imagery and metaphor - "a broken heart awaits its somber fate." Lovely phrase - so vivid and elegant.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/15/2020 7:19:00 PM

thank you so much....my second ever italian sonnet, both written for this contest, but this one i liked better...i was excited with the win... hugs

Chris Green

Date: 1/15/2020 7:39:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in this contest Sandy. Your poem was beautiful and deserved to be in the top 3.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/15/2020 10:51:00 AM

Thank you Chris...i was pleasantly surprised...i didn't expect to be placed at all honestly... :)

Ann Foster

Date: 1/2/2020 9:31:00 PM

So lovely... fairy dust and wine... Ann

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/3/2020 11:39:00 AM

Thank you so much Ann... heading to visit your words momentarily...i will share the wine with you later... hugs

Juliet Ligon

Date: 1/2/2020 8:23:00 PM

Look at you, at it again with a formal form. Well done!

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/2/2020 9:05:00 PM

Thank you Juliet...trying some of these forms... this one took a whole day to write... hugs

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/2/2020 7:15:00 AM

A symphony of emotions composed by your gifted pen--you rock my friend.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/2/2020 10:06:00 AM

Thank you so much Vijay for such a delightful comment my friend...i am trying to learn some forms... this one took awhile...i just feel i have to bend my thoughts to fit forms more than with free verse... hugs

Chris Green

Date: 1/2/2020 6:58:00 AM

Absolutely beautiful my friend. Such a well crafted poem that really hits the mark with it's meter and rhythm not to mention the amazing feel the theme brings to this piece. Loved this Sandy. And the rhymes continue like a bouquet of the most fragrant flowers. :)

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/2/2020 10:04:00 AM

Thank you Chris... your comment has brought a smile... this one took all day to write...i wasn't sure if i was happy with it at first...i am trying forms to learn the rhyme and meter for some contests...i still love my free verse...to me it's much easier... :) hugs

Running Wolves

Date: 1/2/2020 6:51:00 AM

From highest highs... To lowest lows... All points in between... The way you write... Emotions stream... From tears to smiles that gleam... Awesome poetry dear Lady...

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/2/2020 10:02:00 AM

Thank you so much...i don't think i know how to keep emotions out of my poetry...it seems to be where my muse takes the journeys... hugs

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/2/2020 5:49:00 AM

Beautiful sonnet Sandra, you're certainly spreading your wings, when I first came to soup I thought poetry was rhyme and rhyme only. I've had my eyes opened for sure. Hope you have a happy new year. Tom

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/2/2020 10:01:00 AM

Thank you so much Tom...i try and attempt forms here and there... a limerick is not one i have really worked on...but hey you never know...i always struggled in rhyme and meter and seem to be getting a little better with them as time goes on... Happy New Year my friend... hugs