A Heavy Heart Sinks Deep Into The Sea

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A battered heart, full of wounds and tares heavy with tears.

My battered razor cut tormented heart So tender so heavy and full of tears My heart sunk into the consuming unforgiving fathoms Of the darkest deepest coldest sea The waves never washed the tears away The crimson blood bled and dispersed diluted Eventually vanishing into obscurity The pincushion remains of my tender heart Just festered and decayed Under layers and layers of silt Never missed unloved, out of sight And out of reach.

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Ink Empress

Date: 3/25/2024 2:07:00 AM

Dear peter, this is so powerful and so well written in such a creative manner: so soul hitting and eloquent how you’ve expressed here. I especially love the way youv written “ My heart sunk into the consuming unforgiving fathoms Of the darkest deepest coldest sea“ that speaks volumes really! Unforgiving fathoms, when heart sinks there, can be overwhelming! A fave this is for me! Loved every line in this.

Peter Dome
Date: 3/25/2024 4:43:00 AM

Bless you, for, the comments Empress. I'm overwhelmed by your kindness and praise, made my day. Hope I can do the same for you too.A big thank you. take care. Pete.

Tonye George

Date: 3/24/2024 7:09:00 PM

Hurts are meant to be felt. Where happiness lays, love visit so pain comes along. Cheers Peter.

Peter Dome
Date: 3/24/2024 7:23:00 PM

Thank you Tonye, always a pleasure. Hope you are okay. You are right that you said. I, really appreciate you stopping by. Take Good care. Have a great week. Pete.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 3/24/2024 4:14:00 PM

wonderful and powerful image you created, Peter. I especially liked: The pincushion remains of my tender heart Just festered and decayed. A battered heart does sink into the all consuming fathoms. Well said. Nicely penned. Enjoy your evening, Sara

Peter Dome
Date: 3/24/2024 7:28:00 PM

You're so kind. Much appreciated. Coming from the Queen of the quill. It's quite a comment. Thank you so much. Love your talent. So exceptional, and so inspiring. Thank you take care,. Pete, have a good week.