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A Heart Never Used

A heart
Never used now
Shall die

Dying
A congealing
Dead beat

Beaten
Down to silence
Some where

Where pure
passions exist
Then flee

Fleeing
Soulless to hide
Now lone

Lonesome
Turns to fury
At heart

Heartless
Cold and hollow
Always






Rick Lamoureux's contest
"Mussetle Train"

Copyright © Kelly Deschler | Year Posted 2014

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Isaiah Zerbst Date: 1/31/2015 11:23:00 AM This is a superbly done train. The developing thoughts on the state of the heart are clearly traced, and drawn out in clear detail despite the very few words used. Very admirable in my book. Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 2/2/2015 10:07:00 PM Thank you very much, Isaiah. Your encouraging comments meant a lot to me, especially since this was my first try at writing in this form. I wasn't sure if I had done it correctly, but now I do!

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/15/2015 9:28:00 AM It sounds like you are describing a place in Canada. I love being near water and trees. Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/18/2015 2:15:00 AM So do I, Rick. I grew up living in the country, near lakes and forests, and that will always be my home... The northern edge of Wisconsin borders with Canada, so I imagine that the two areas would be very similar.

John Fleming Date: 1/13/2015 1:52:00 AM A powerful piece of prose, Kelly...excellent!! :-) john. Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/17/2015 1:10:00 AM Thank you so much for your kind comments, John! :)

Poet Destroyer A Date: 1/11/2015 9:03:00 PM Awesome win...PD Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/10/2015 6:49:00 PM I live in Kelowna British Columbia on Lake Okanagan. I think this is one of the most beautiful locations in the World. We have Ski mountains golf courses and numerous wineries as well as some gorgeous lakes. Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/14/2015 7:56:00 PM I have heard of Lake Okanagan. It looks like a very serene place to live. I live in Big Falls, Wisconsin, which is just a small, rural town. It is also very serene with dense forests, clear blue lakes, and wildlife that roams right into my backyard.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 1/9/2015 8:55:00 PM You wrote a poem with great heartfelt substance and tragedy, Kelly, in such a difficult form...a first place for me. Congrats!! Hugs, Rhonda Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/13/2015 12:11:00 AM I truly appreciate your kind comments, Rhonda. They really meant so much to me! Hugs :)

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/7/2015 8:50:00 AM Yes it was a nice Christmas, we went to Vancouver to see my wife's family. Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/10/2015 1:35:00 PM I'm glad to hear that, Rick. I've never been to Canada, but I live in Wisconsin, so I am close by. I bet it is a very beautiful country to live in!

Kayod5 Kayode Date: 1/5/2015 11:54:00 PM A great work, congrats on the win Kelly...huggs Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/9/2015 12:44:00 AM Thank you very much, Kayode! Hugs :)

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 1/5/2015 11:03:00 PM I would have had this near the top Kelly. Congratulations on your win. Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/9/2015 12:34:00 AM Thank you so much, Connie. Your kind words really meant a lot to me!

Joseph May Date: 1/5/2015 10:58:00 PM Congrats on a fine win Kelly Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/9/2015 12:27:00 AM Thank you very much, Joseph!

Paul Callus Date: 1/5/2015 5:00:00 PM Back again Kelly...good thing you gave this form a try...it became a winning poem! Congratulations! hugs // paul Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/8/2015 12:53:00 AM We can't win if we don't try! ...I feel proud of myself for taking on this challenging form, which is something that I do not do very often. Even though the result was not what I was hoping for, I am still glad that I wrote for this contest... I appreciate the kind congrats, Paul. Thank you very much! Hugs :)

Jan Allison Date: 1/5/2015 4:15:00 PM deep and Sad Kelly - many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/8/2015 12:38:00 AM Thanks so much, Jan! I appreciate you stopping by. Hugs :)

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/5/2015 3:47:00 PM Hi Kelly, congratulations on placing in my contest. I hope you had a goood Christmas as well. Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/7/2015 1:09:00 AM Hi Rick, thank you for the congrats and for including my poem on your winner's list! I had a great Christmas with my family. I hope it was an enjoyable one for you, too!

Liam Mcdaid Date: 1/2/2015 1:52:00 PM deep very beautifully penned kelly i pray your festive season was filled with happiness wishing you a happy new year dear friend Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 1/5/2015 12:34:00 AM Thank you so much, Liam. I always appreciate your kind words, my dear friend. Happy New Year to you! This Christmas was a great one. I hope it was for you, as well.

Wilma Neels Date: 12/28/2014 7:58:00 AM You made it look so easy Kelly :) Enjoyed this write of yours. Hope your Christmas was a good one! tc Wilma Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 12/28/2014 10:40:00 PM Thank you for your kind words, Wilma. I'm glad you've enjoyed it! This new form may look easy to write, but it is not... I had a great Christmas and I hope you did, too! :)

Maurice Yvonne Date: 12/27/2014 7:31:00 AM Kelly you should patten "A Heart Never Used" before some young songstress steals it from you. The whole write is imaginative, unique and a one of a kind. I love it. For me this a fav! I hope your holidays have been happy and that the new year fulfills all your important goals. Lots Of Love, Maurice. Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 12/28/2014 12:48:00 AM I wouldn't want anyone to steal my poem, but it would be cool to hear someone singing the words that I wrote. Like Katy Perry, Kelly Clarkson, Pink, Avril Lavigne, Lady Gaga, Rihanna or Iggy Azalea... :) Thank you for the wonderful comments and the fav. That means so much to me, Maurice!

Arthur Vaso Date: 12/25/2014 11:03:00 PM I came by to read this again, and of course to wish you a very Merry Christmas!!!! hugs! Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 12/26/2014 8:15:00 PM Thank you, Arthur. Merry Christmas to you, too! ...And here is another hug for you :)

David Williams Date: 12/25/2014 3:14:00 AM Well done, I like it... Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 12/27/2014 6:40:00 PM Thank you, David!

Poet Destroyer A Date: 12/24/2014 7:40:00 PM Kelly,, Stopping by to say Hello, and Wish you a very Merry, Merry Christmas!!! May it bring you joy, happiness and everything else you deserve. Merry Christmas and a Happy New year! Forever ~LINDA~ Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 12/24/2014 3:08:00 PM may your Christmas be really bright, Kelly!.. huggs Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 12/24/2014 4:46:00 PM Thank you, Nette! I wish you a wonderful Christmas, too!

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/24/2014 12:28:00 PM you did a great job with this form. It is challenging one to me anyway!! Merry Christmas to you. Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/24/2014 9:57:00 AM Thanks for participating in my contest! Merry Christmas. Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 12/25/2014 11:11:00 PM You're welcome, Rick. This new form is very interesting, so I thought that I would give it a try... Merry Christmas to you and your family!

Joseph May Date: 12/24/2014 8:20:00 AM May your heart be filled with joy during this holiday season.....Merry Christmas Kelly Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 12/25/2014 11:07:00 PM Thank you very much for your kind words, Joseph. I hope that you and your family had a wonderful Christmas!

Paul Callus Date: 12/22/2014 9:12:00 AM Pleased to see you riding the Mussetle Train, Kelly! You have done it with ease of thought and expression. Well done! I am sure there is a lot of warm love waiting to give that heart new hope and strength. #7 // May you enjoy this festive season; all the best for 2015. hugs // paul Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 12/25/2014 5:10:00 PM There is plenty of love to be found out there for any heart, especially at this festive time of the year... I do appreciate your kind words, Paul. Thank you so much!... This new form was very interesting, so I thought that I would give it a try.

Nette Onclaud Date: 12/21/2014 4:21:00 PM just the way a spectacular write on a deep subject should be, Kelly...assonance, delivery of images and solid diction mark this fascinating work!.. you are awesome!.. huggs Login to Reply Kelly Deschler Date: 12/24/2014 4:43:00 PM I truly appreciate your kind and encouraging words, Nette. Thank you so very much! I am happy that you've enjoyed my poem :) hugs

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