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A Heart Never Used

A heart
Never used now
Shall die

Dying
A congealing
Dead beat

Beaten
Down to silence
Some where

Where pure
passions exist
Then flee

Fleeing
Soulless to hide
Now lone

Lonesome
Turns to fury
At heart

Heartless
Cold and hollow
Always






Rick Lamoureux's contest
"Mussetle Train"


Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 1/31/2015 11:23:00 AM
This is a superbly done train. The developing thoughts on the state of the heart are clearly traced, and drawn out in clear detail despite the very few words used. Very admirable in my book.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 2/2/2015 10:07:00 PM
Thank you very much, Isaiah. Your encouraging comments meant a lot to me, especially since this was my first try at writing in this form. I wasn't sure if I had done it correctly, but now I do!
Date: 1/15/2015 9:28:00 AM
It sounds like you are describing a place in Canada. I love being near water and trees.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/18/2015 2:15:00 AM
So do I, Rick. I grew up living in the country, near lakes and forests, and that will always be my home... The northern edge of Wisconsin borders with Canada, so I imagine that the two areas would be very similar.
Date: 1/13/2015 1:52:00 AM
A powerful piece of prose, Kelly...excellent!! :-) john.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/17/2015 1:10:00 AM
Thank you so much for your kind comments, John! :)
Date: 1/11/2015 9:03:00 PM
Awesome win...PD
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Date: 1/10/2015 6:49:00 PM
I live in Kelowna British Columbia on Lake Okanagan. I think this is one of the most beautiful locations in the World. We have Ski mountains golf courses and numerous wineries as well as some gorgeous lakes.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/14/2015 7:56:00 PM
I have heard of Lake Okanagan. It looks like a very serene place to live. I live in Big Falls, Wisconsin, which is just a small, rural town. It is also very serene with dense forests, clear blue lakes, and wildlife that roams right into my backyard.
Date: 1/9/2015 8:55:00 PM
You wrote a poem with great heartfelt substance and tragedy, Kelly, in such a difficult form...a first place for me. Congrats!! Hugs, Rhonda
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/13/2015 12:11:00 AM
I truly appreciate your kind comments, Rhonda. They really meant so much to me! Hugs :)
Date: 1/9/2015 4:13:00 PM
Kelly, incredible write and one of the top for me.. Congrats on the win!
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/11/2015 2:42:00 PM
Your kind comments really meant a lot to me, Dave. Thank you so much!
Date: 1/7/2015 8:50:00 AM
Yes it was a nice Christmas, we went to Vancouver to see my wife's family.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/10/2015 1:35:00 PM
I'm glad to hear that, Rick. I've never been to Canada, but I live in Wisconsin, so I am close by. I bet it is a very beautiful country to live in!
Date: 1/5/2015 11:54:00 PM
A great work, congrats on the win Kelly...huggs
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/9/2015 12:44:00 AM
Thank you very much, Kayode! Hugs :)
Date: 1/5/2015 11:03:00 PM
I would have had this near the top Kelly. Congratulations on your win.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/9/2015 12:34:00 AM
Thank you so much, Connie. Your kind words really meant a lot to me!
Date: 1/5/2015 10:58:00 PM
Congrats on a fine win Kelly
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/9/2015 12:27:00 AM
Thank you very much, Joseph!
Date: 1/5/2015 5:00:00 PM
Back again Kelly...good thing you gave this form a try...it became a winning poem! Congratulations! hugs // paul
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/8/2015 12:53:00 AM
We can't win if we don't try! ...I feel proud of myself for taking on this challenging form, which is something that I do not do very often. Even though the result was not what I was hoping for, I am still glad that I wrote for this contest... I appreciate the kind congrats, Paul. Thank you very much! Hugs :)
Date: 1/5/2015 4:15:00 PM
deep and Sad Kelly - many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/8/2015 12:38:00 AM
Thanks so much, Jan! I appreciate you stopping by. Hugs :)
Date: 1/5/2015 3:47:00 PM
Hi Kelly, congratulations on placing in my contest. I hope you had a goood Christmas as well.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/7/2015 1:09:00 AM
Hi Rick, thank you for the congrats and for including my poem on your winner's list! I had a great Christmas with my family. I hope it was an enjoyable one for you, too!
Date: 1/2/2015 1:52:00 PM
deep very beautifully penned kelly i pray your festive season was filled with happiness wishing you a happy new year dear friend
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/5/2015 12:34:00 AM
Thank you so much, Liam. I always appreciate your kind words, my dear friend. Happy New Year to you! This Christmas was a great one. I hope it was for you, as well.
Date: 12/28/2014 7:58:00 AM
You made it look so easy Kelly :) Enjoyed this write of yours. Hope your Christmas was a good one! tc Wilma
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/28/2014 10:40:00 PM
Thank you for your kind words, Wilma. I'm glad you've enjoyed it! This new form may look easy to write, but it is not... I had a great Christmas and I hope you did, too! :)
Date: 12/27/2014 7:31:00 AM
Kelly you should patten "A Heart Never Used" before some young songstress steals it from you. The whole write is imaginative, unique and a one of a kind. I love it. For me this a fav! I hope your holidays have been happy and that the new year fulfills all your important goals. Lots Of Love, Maurice.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/28/2014 12:48:00 AM
I wouldn't want anyone to steal my poem, but it would be cool to hear someone singing the words that I wrote. Like Katy Perry, Kelly Clarkson, Pink, Avril Lavigne, Lady Gaga, Rihanna or Iggy Azalea... :) Thank you for the wonderful comments and the fav. That means so much to me, Maurice!
Date: 12/25/2014 11:03:00 PM
I came by to read this again, and of course to wish you a very Merry Christmas!!!! hugs!
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/26/2014 8:15:00 PM
Thank you, Arthur. Merry Christmas to you, too! ...And here is another hug for you :)
Date: 12/25/2014 3:14:00 AM
Well done, I like it...
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/27/2014 6:40:00 PM
Thank you, David!
Date: 12/24/2014 7:40:00 PM
Kelly,, Stopping by to say Hello, and Wish you a very Merry, Merry Christmas!!! May it bring you joy, happiness and everything else you deserve. Merry Christmas and a Happy New year! Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/24/2014 3:08:00 PM
may your Christmas be really bright, Kelly!.. huggs
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/24/2014 4:46:00 PM
Thank you, Nette! I wish you a wonderful Christmas, too!
Date: 12/24/2014 12:28:00 PM
you did a great job with this form. It is challenging one to me anyway!! Merry Christmas to you.
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Date: 12/24/2014 9:57:00 AM
Thanks for participating in my contest! Merry Christmas.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/25/2014 11:11:00 PM
You're welcome, Rick. This new form is very interesting, so I thought that I would give it a try... Merry Christmas to you and your family!
Date: 12/24/2014 8:20:00 AM
May your heart be filled with joy during this holiday season.....Merry Christmas Kelly
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/25/2014 11:07:00 PM
Thank you very much for your kind words, Joseph. I hope that you and your family had a wonderful Christmas!
Date: 12/22/2014 9:12:00 AM
Pleased to see you riding the Mussetle Train, Kelly! You have done it with ease of thought and expression. Well done! I am sure there is a lot of warm love waiting to give that heart new hope and strength. #7 // May you enjoy this festive season; all the best for 2015. hugs // paul
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/25/2014 5:10:00 PM
There is plenty of love to be found out there for any heart, especially at this festive time of the year... I do appreciate your kind words, Paul. Thank you so much!... This new form was very interesting, so I thought that I would give it a try.
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