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A Haiku With a Splash

on the rocks

             a heap of clothes

               splashing water


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Contest: Thirteen Syllables Or Less
        Sponsor: Timothy Hicks
                  Placed 5th

soundwaterhaiku

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Lenny Gazbowski

April 14, 2016 at 10:16 PM

Lovely write - a delight :-) Reminded me of skinny dipping in Belgium, last century !

Paul Callus

April 15, 2016 at 12:44 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Lenny:) I too seem to remember skinny dipping and full moons....last century:) // paul

Iris E. Sankey- Lewis

April 5, 2016 at 7:32 PM

Congrats on your placement, Paul. Also, thanks for your posts on my fb page.

Paul Callus

April 6, 2016 at 9:25 AM

Thank you, Iris. I do my best to keep up with different writers and fb friends, but time is never on my side:) ~ Regards // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

April 4, 2016 at 11:34 AM

great Paul. Regards>>RAJAT

Paul Callus

April 4, 2016 at 3:08 PM

Thank you, Rajat! ~ Regards // paul

Beautiful Scars

April 3, 2016 at 12:23 PM

Paul, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo

Paul Callus

April 3, 2016 at 12:42 PM

Many thanks, Laura:) Always a pleasure to have you visiting! ~ Regards // paul

David Mohn

April 2, 2016 at 3:01 PM

wonderful Paul...congrats :)

Paul Callus

April 3, 2016 at 3:43 AM

Thank you for reading and liking, David! ~ Regards // paul

Charmaine Chircop

April 1, 2016 at 6:51 PM

Well desrved win, that is one fantastic haiku.

Paul Callus

April 2, 2016 at 2:57 PM

Thank you Charm; much appreciated coming from one who excels in her haiku:) ~ Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Bl Devnath

April 1, 2016 at 12:32 PM

Congrats on your win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl

Paul Callus

April 3, 2016 at 3:57 AM

Very lovely of you to visit with congrats, my friend...thank you! Regards // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

April 1, 2016 at 2:16 AM

Congrats on ur superb win with this tender haiku Paul..

Paul Callus

April 3, 2016 at 4:08 AM

Your congrats and support are much appreciated, Upma:) ~ Wishing you all the best! // paul

Andrea Dietrich

April 1, 2016 at 1:02 AM

Cool Haiku, Paul, and a COOL WIN. Congrats.

Paul Callus

April 2, 2016 at 5:17 PM

That is lovely of you, Andrea:) Love your cool comments! Regards // paul

Aurore Severo

April 1, 2016 at 12:08 AM

haha is this a seixku, very suggestive xoxoxoxox

Paul Callus

April 2, 2016 at 5:46 PM

I won't deny what you insinuate, Aurore:) ...after all a haiku is supposed to be suggestive...! Regards & xox // paul

Timothy Hicks

April 1, 2016 at 12:37 AM

.... that's the same thoughts I got! Lol ...

Daver Austin

March 31, 2016 at 12:30 PM

This is roughing it, but that's the Chinese for you. Luck in the contest. Love, daver

Paul Callus

April 3, 2016 at 4:16 AM

Good morning Dave; always a pleasure to have you dropping by:) Stay well! ~ Regards // paul

Rizwana Bhurani

March 31, 2016 at 9:23 AM

Wow haiku.....pen with experience.... Congrats

Paul Callus

April 2, 2016 at 5:33 PM

Your 'wow' says a lot, Rizwana...thank you for the lovely comment! ~ Regards // paul

Constance La France

March 31, 2016 at 9:15 AM

Paul, congratulations on your win with this wonderful haiku ~

Paul Callus

April 2, 2016 at 5:37 PM

Thank you for the congrats and for commenting favourably, Constance. Enjoy your weekend:) // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

March 31, 2016 at 3:39 AM

Big Congrats Paul! Wow, he judged this fast. So happy to see yours high on the list my friend. # 7 ; )

Paul Callus

April 2, 2016 at 5:40 PM

Many thanks for the 7 and congrats, Connie:) Thank you also for having had faith in it from the start! ~ Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Timothy Hicks

March 31, 2016 at 3:53 AM

I sorta judge as I go along ... ;) Having read quite a lot of haiku over the years, I've become attuned to what sticks out the most to me ... lol. LOVE haiku :)

Timothy Hicks

March 31, 2016 at 3:13 AM

Congrats Paul! You're perfect for this form ... simplicity, subtlety ... and subtext! This is excellent, and very playful. I've written a haiku similar to this one with clothes being abandoned to go play in the water ... though it could go a sensual route as well (my personal preference) ... agreed with Connie below. The a-ha was definitely there.

Paul Callus

April 2, 2016 at 5:43 PM

I'm somewhat late in thanking you for my placement, Timothy; I'm being kept ultra busy!! I think I'll go for the sensual route, too:) ~ All the best...paul