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A Haiku With a Splash

on the rocks a heap of clothes splashing water --------------------------------------- Contest: Thirteen Syllables Or Less Sponsor: Timothy Hicks Placed 5th

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Lenny Gazbowski

Date: 4/14/2016 10:16:00 PM

Lovely write - a delight :-) Reminded me of skinny dipping in Belgium, last century !

Paul Callus
Date: 4/15/2016 12:44:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Lenny:) I too seem to remember skinny dipping and full moons....last century:) // paul

Iris E. S-Lewis

Date: 4/5/2016 7:32:00 PM

Congrats on your placement, Paul. Also, thanks for your posts on my fb page.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/6/2016 9:25:00 AM

Thank you, Iris. I do my best to keep up with different writers and fb friends, but time is never on my side:) ~ Regards // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 4/4/2016 11:34:00 AM

great Paul. Regards>>RAJAT

Paul Callus
Date: 4/4/2016 3:08:00 PM

Thank you, Rajat! ~ Regards // paul

Lu Loo

Date: 4/3/2016 12:23:00 PM

Paul, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo

Paul Callus
Date: 4/3/2016 12:42:00 PM

Many thanks, Laura:) Always a pleasure to have you visiting! ~ Regards // paul

David Mohn

Date: 4/2/2016 3:01:00 PM

wonderful Paul...congrats :)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/3/2016 3:43:00 AM

Thank you for reading and liking, David! ~ Regards // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/1/2016 6:51:00 PM

Well desrved win, that is one fantastic haiku.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 2:57:00 PM

Thank you Charm; much appreciated coming from one who excels in her haiku:) ~ Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/1/2016 12:32:00 PM

Congrats on your win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl

Paul Callus
Date: 4/3/2016 3:57:00 AM

Very lovely of you to visit with congrats, my friend...thank you! Regards // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 4/1/2016 2:16:00 AM

Congrats on ur superb win with this tender haiku Paul..

Paul Callus
Date: 4/3/2016 4:08:00 AM

Your congrats and support are much appreciated, Upma:) ~ Wishing you all the best! // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/1/2016 1:02:00 AM

Cool Haiku, Paul, and a COOL WIN. Congrats.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 5:17:00 PM

That is lovely of you, Andrea:) Love your cool comments! Regards // paul

Aurore Severo

Date: 4/1/2016 12:08:00 AM

haha is this a seixku, very suggestive xoxoxoxox

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 5:46:00 PM

I won't deny what you insinuate, Aurore:) ...after all a haiku is supposed to be suggestive...! Regards & xox // paul

Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/1/2016 12:37:00 AM

.... that's the same thoughts I got! Lol ...

Daver Austin

Date: 3/31/2016 12:30:00 PM

This is roughing it, but that's the Chinese for you. Luck in the contest. Love, daver

Paul Callus
Date: 4/3/2016 4:16:00 AM

Good morning Dave; always a pleasure to have you dropping by:) Stay well! ~ Regards // paul

Rizwana Bhurani

Date: 3/31/2016 9:23:00 AM

Wow haiku.....pen with experience.... Congrats

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 5:33:00 PM

Your 'wow' says a lot, Rizwana...thank you for the lovely comment! ~ Regards // paul

Constance La France

Date: 3/31/2016 9:15:00 AM

Paul, congratulations on your win with this wonderful haiku ~

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 5:37:00 PM

Thank you for the congrats and for commenting favourably, Constance. Enjoy your weekend:) // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/31/2016 3:39:00 AM

Big Congrats Paul! Wow, he judged this fast. So happy to see yours high on the list my friend. # 7 ; )

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 5:40:00 PM

Many thanks for the 7 and congrats, Connie:) Thank you also for having had faith in it from the start! ~ Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/31/2016 3:53:00 AM

I sorta judge as I go along ... ;) Having read quite a lot of haiku over the years, I've become attuned to what sticks out the most to me ... lol. LOVE haiku :)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/31/2016 3:13:00 AM

Congrats Paul! You're perfect for this form ... simplicity, subtlety ... and subtext! This is excellent, and very playful. I've written a haiku similar to this one with clothes being abandoned to go play in the water ... though it could go a sensual route as well (my personal preference) ... agreed with Connie below. The a-ha was definitely there.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 5:43:00 PM

I'm somewhat late in thanking you for my placement, Timothy; I'm being kept ultra busy!! I think I'll go for the sensual route, too:) ~ All the best...paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/31/2016 2:59:00 AM

I caught the aha! In this haiiku Paul! Hope to see this on the winning list. I prefer shorter haiku as long as the message is clear. ; )

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 4:52:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments and the faith you showed in my haiku, Connie! ~ Regards :) paul

Probir Gupta

Date: 3/31/2016 12:15:00 AM

Beauty in splash...

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 5:14:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by, Probir. Regards // paul

Rhoma Em

Date: 3/30/2016 7:50:00 PM

Reminds me of women laundering by the river! Delightful.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 5:06:00 PM

That is a great image which you conjure in your mind, Rhoma! Thank you for reading and commenting so positively! ~ Regards // paul

Tim Smith

Date: 3/30/2016 4:48:00 PM

I like the image you portray here Paul. Good luck in the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 4:11:00 PM

Thank you Tim...your gl helped:) ...found my name on the winners' list!! // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/30/2016 4:42:00 PM

i love this, paul! these few words bring out the joy of jumping into a lake or pool or the ocean. nicely done...

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 3:55:00 PM

You too provide lovely feedback, Ilene:) Thank you! ~ Regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 3/30/2016 4:33:00 PM

fabulous imagery Paul - I can just see you swimming in the sea:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/30/2016 5:51:00 PM

I am glad you 'saw' the the swimmer, Jan...that means I reached my aim:) Thank you, hugs and goodnight // paul