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A Friendly-Snake

A Friendly-Snake

As I loved to sit in the mountain
a strange snake appeared
with a long tail
red eyes
big head
but a smile on its face
fearfully
but hopefully
I began to smile too
it approached me slowly
I moved backwards slowly
beginning to doubt
as its long tongue was out
it kept its smile
I smiled
yes, I began to feel comfortable
but uncomfortable at the same time
it smiled
I smiled
I took it home
to my own personal house
it felt at home
enjoying comfort
the snake began to look at me weirdly
strangely
I realised it was not a friendly-snake as I thought
I was deceived
I was made to believe
but devil himself
it chased me away from my very own house
it took over
to rule
I now stay outside my own house 
because of fear
fear of this dangerous snake
untrustworthy
unfaithful snake.

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Luis Estable August 1, 2017 at 2:25 PM You need here do more than just tell a story. You need poetic diction and some kind of twist. Right now this poem stands as a simple story in prose about a snake you met, nothing more. I urge to do more than this so you can have a good poem. PS I have a book of poems on kindle. If you like a copy, go to Amazon.com and type my name Luis A. Estable or the name of the book. "One hundred Sonnets, Book Two." Thanks and keep on writing. Luis A. Estable Sky Poet Sa August 1, 2017 at 2:30 PM Powerful advice. Useful help. Thank you very much Luis. I shall do my best to consider that. Sometimes a poem becomes dry but that is normal. We grow everyday in poetry and knowledge. POET_Loads.