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A Fish Haiku

gulping for air
when minnows swim
beyond their depth


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A Fish Haiku Contest
Hosted by Mick Talbot
Placed 3rd
19th April 2018

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Jan Allison

April 28, 2018 at 1:05 PM

many congrats Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

April 28, 2018 at 4:19 PM

Thank you, Jan. Went to Prize Day yesterday, to see the students give an excellent rendition of Sister Act, and Valentina collecting a couple of prizes:) Hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux

April 28, 2018 at 8:43 AM

You as well Paul.

Paul Callus

April 28, 2018 at 4:15 PM

:) :)

Richard Lamoureux

April 26, 2018 at 7:57 AM

Delightful one Paul. Congrats on your win.

Paul Callus

April 28, 2018 at 8:24 AM

Thank you, Richard. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Laura Hay

April 25, 2018 at 7:44 AM

Congratulations Paul, it's a lovely visual for sure. Warm regards, Laura.

Paul Callus

April 25, 2018 at 1:21 PM

Thank you, Laura. I love swimming, but never take too many chances:) ~ Warm regards // paul

Moon Flower

April 25, 2018 at 1:35 AM

Simply beautiful 'ku. Congrats!

Paul Callus

April 25, 2018 at 1:16 PM

Thank you, Moon Flower. Have a nice day! Regards // paul

Eve Roper

April 24, 2018 at 8:03 PM

Great imigary, Paul, congratulations on your win hugs Eve

Paul Callus

April 25, 2018 at 1:18 PM

Many thanks, Eve. Best regards & Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

April 24, 2018 at 3:34 PM

Oh, so it said "or fewer" Good to know!!

Paul Callus

April 24, 2018 at 4:00 PM

Line Gauthier

April 23, 2018 at 10:09 PM

Clever haiku, Paul. Congrats on your well deserved podium win.

Paul Callus

April 24, 2018 at 12:07 PM

Thank you, Line. I'm quite pleased with my placement. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

April 23, 2018 at 3:42 PM

Yes, it WAS you who did a modern haiku. I am so happy you made the list. Congrats, paul.

Paul Callus

April 24, 2018 at 12:08 PM

I have just noticed that Moon Flower won top spot with a modern entry....

Paul Callus

April 23, 2018 at 4:11 PM

Yes, indeed, it was ME Andrea:) I have just been through the contest rules and found this: "3 Three lines, 5, 7, 5 or fewer syllables per line." Thank you for looking out for me:) Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

April 23, 2018 at 2:01 PM

- Congratulations on your 3st place in the haiku contest, Paul :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus

April 23, 2018 at 3:58 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise:) Hugs // paul

Susan Gentry

April 23, 2018 at 12:51 PM

Oh yes. This is an excellent haiku. Profound. A fave. Congratulations on your win.

Paul Callus

April 23, 2018 at 3:45 PM

Thank you very much, Susan. Both the lovely comments and fav are appreciated. Regards // paul

Cheryl Hoffman

April 22, 2018 at 9:42 PM

An awesome haiku Paul; good luck in the contest!~Che :)

Paul Callus

April 23, 2018 at 8:58 AM

Your 'awesome' is much appreciated, Cheryl:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Pashang Salehi

April 21, 2018 at 12:19 PM

I can relate to your minnows... I am way way beyond my depth... A good one indeed..

Pashang Salehi

April 26, 2018 at 1:10 AM

Always... :)

Paul Callus

April 21, 2018 at 1:33 PM

I read your pleasant comments with a smile, Pashang:) Thank you for visiting. Regards // paul

Elaine George

April 21, 2018 at 5:43 AM

You are so good at writing the form, Paul. Excellent Haiku.

Paul Callus

April 21, 2018 at 8:34 AM

I try my best, Elaine:) Thank you for the complimentary comments. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

April 20, 2018 at 6:30 PM

Good one, Paul. Soupmail for ya

Paul Callus

April 21, 2018 at 8:33 AM

Thank you, Andrea...on both counts:) Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

April 20, 2018 at 2:11 PM

Indeed, profound. You give us something to ponder, Paul. Also, the image is very strong and you should do well in the contest. (Mine was not for the contest) Wishing you success! Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus

April 20, 2018 at 4:03 PM

Thank you dear Carolyn. There are times when it's best to keep our feet on the ground! Have a lovely weekend. Hugs & Love // paul

Nette Onclaud

April 20, 2018 at 12:14 PM

paul, enjoyed your aha ' going overboard' moment--very subliminal!.. good one!.. huggs

Paul Callus

April 20, 2018 at 4:01 PM

Thank you, Nette. I'm pleased you enjoyed:) Hugs // paul

Kim Rodrigues

April 20, 2018 at 5:56 AM

Wow! Profound!

Paul Callus

April 20, 2018 at 3:59 PM

Indeed, 'profound' is an apt adjective, Kim:) Thank you. Regards // paul

Maria Williams

April 20, 2018 at 4:56 AM

There is a very good lesson to be learnt by all here Paul. Very well written - I will watch out that I too do not get out of my depth - however - that won't stop me striving to increase my lung capacity so to swim in deeper waters. All the best in the Contest my dear friend...Hugs...Maria :)

Paul Callus

April 20, 2018 at 3:48 PM

Thank you, Maria. I take it that you enjoy swimming:) I live quite near to the beach, and from May to November I nearly go swimming every day. Hugs // paul