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A Fish Haiku

gulping for air
when minnows swim
beyond their depth


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A Fish Haiku Contest
Hosted by Mick Talbot
Placed 3rd
19th April 2018

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Jan Allison

Date: 4/28/2018 1:05:00 PM

many congrats Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 4/28/2018 4:19:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. Went to Prize Day yesterday, to see the students give an excellent rendition of Sister Act, and Valentina collecting a couple of prizes:) Hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/28/2018 8:43:00 AM

You as well Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/28/2018 4:15:00 PM

:) :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/26/2018 7:57:00 AM

Delightful one Paul. Congrats on your win.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/28/2018 8:24:00 AM

Thank you, Richard. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Laura Hay

Date: 4/25/2018 7:44:00 AM

Congratulations Paul, it's a lovely visual for sure. Warm regards, Laura.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/25/2018 1:21:00 PM

Thank you, Laura. I love swimming, but never take too many chances:) ~ Warm regards // paul

Moon Flower

Date: 4/25/2018 1:35:00 AM

Simply beautiful 'ku. Congrats!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/25/2018 1:16:00 PM

Thank you, Moon Flower. Have a nice day! Regards // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 4/24/2018 8:03:00 PM

Great imigary, Paul, congratulations on your win hugs Eve

Paul Callus
Date: 4/25/2018 1:18:00 PM

Many thanks, Eve. Best regards & Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/24/2018 3:34:00 PM

Oh, so it said "or fewer" Good to know!!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/24/2018 4:00:00 PM

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/23/2018 10:09:00 PM

Clever haiku, Paul. Congrats on your well deserved podium win.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/24/2018 12:07:00 PM

Thank you, Line. I'm quite pleased with my placement. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/23/2018 3:42:00 PM

Yes, it WAS you who did a modern haiku. I am so happy you made the list. Congrats, paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/24/2018 12:08:00 PM

I have just noticed that Moon Flower won top spot with a modern entry....

Paul Callus
Date: 4/23/2018 4:11:00 PM

Yes, indeed, it was ME Andrea:) I have just been through the contest rules and found this: "3 Three lines, 5, 7, 5 or fewer syllables per line." Thank you for looking out for me:) Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/23/2018 2:01:00 PM

- Congratulations on your 3st place in the haiku contest, Paul :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/23/2018 3:58:00 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise:) Hugs // paul

Susan Gentry

Date: 4/23/2018 12:51:00 PM

Oh yes. This is an excellent haiku. Profound. A fave. Congratulations on your win.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/23/2018 3:45:00 PM

Thank you very much, Susan. Both the lovely comments and fav are appreciated. Regards // paul

Cheryl Hoffman

Date: 4/22/2018 9:42:00 PM

An awesome haiku Paul; good luck in the contest!~Che :)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/23/2018 8:58:00 AM

Your 'awesome' is much appreciated, Cheryl:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Pashang Salehi

Date: 4/21/2018 12:19:00 PM

I can relate to your minnows... I am way way beyond my depth... A good one indeed..

Pashang Salehi
Date: 4/26/2018 1:10:00 AM

Always... :)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/21/2018 1:33:00 PM

I read your pleasant comments with a smile, Pashang:) Thank you for visiting. Regards // paul

Elaine George

Date: 4/21/2018 5:43:00 AM

You are so good at writing the form, Paul. Excellent Haiku.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/21/2018 8:34:00 AM

I try my best, Elaine:) Thank you for the complimentary comments. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/20/2018 6:30:00 PM

Good one, Paul. Soupmail for ya

Paul Callus
Date: 4/21/2018 8:33:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea...on both counts:) Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/20/2018 2:11:00 PM

Indeed, profound. You give us something to ponder, Paul. Also, the image is very strong and you should do well in the contest. (Mine was not for the contest) Wishing you success! Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 4/20/2018 4:03:00 PM

Thank you dear Carolyn. There are times when it's best to keep our feet on the ground! Have a lovely weekend. Hugs & Love // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/20/2018 12:14:00 PM

paul, enjoyed your aha ' going overboard' moment--very subliminal!.. good one!.. huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 4/20/2018 4:01:00 PM

Thank you, Nette. I'm pleased you enjoyed:) Hugs // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/20/2018 5:56:00 AM

Wow! Profound!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/20/2018 3:59:00 PM

Indeed, 'profound' is an apt adjective, Kim:) Thank you. Regards // paul

Maria Williams

Date: 4/20/2018 4:56:00 AM

There is a very good lesson to be learnt by all here Paul. Very well written - I will watch out that I too do not get out of my depth - however - that won't stop me striving to increase my lung capacity so to swim in deeper waters. All the best in the Contest my dear friend...Hugs...Maria :)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/20/2018 3:48:00 PM

Thank you, Maria. I take it that you enjoy swimming:) I live quite near to the beach, and from May to November I nearly go swimming every day. Hugs // paul