Reya Suri Poet Rhyme

A Fault In YOUR Sentiment

I yearn for not but your devotion true
A sacred bond you must uphold
You breathed me in the breath I drew
Yet love runs from you faint and cold

Have I transgressed? I toil in vain,
Yet still, you shun my desperate plea.
Affection spurned, a heart in pain,
Forsaken in this MISERY.

Hey, sire, would you ever love?
“I do not, I do not care.”
Can you take me seriously?
“You’re young and stupid.”

Not a day by without the wonder
Of the lack of sentiment you bring
Reflection, though not a blunder
So in your fault I now can sing.

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Sotto Poet April 5, 2025 at 6:40 AM This is profound, akin to a struggle for the essence of existence. I appreciate the optimistic energy and cheerful disposition of this! Your command of language is profound and elegant. You have expressed it flawlessly! Your poetry was a pleasure to read, Reya. Reya Suri April 5, 2025 at 2:22 PM Thank you!! I'm quite shocked by this compliment, I wasn't expecting my language to be called "elegant" after this poem stated "You're young and stupid." I'm still glad it's not too brutal, and expresses my idea profoundly!

CayCay Godwin April 4, 2025 at 11:45 AM "you breathed me in the breath i drew' - love that line. As Andrea said, poem delivers sadness, as intended, then closes by throwing at too-bad-for-you-stick at the feeling devoid thing! CayCay Reya Suri April 4, 2025 at 1:44 PM Thank you CayCay!!! I did love the ending too :) I’m glad this is sad and compelling!

Andrea Dietrich April 3, 2025 at 12:09 PM Sad one but you end it on a great note! Reya Suri April 3, 2025 at 12:45 PM My intention was to make the ending seem like I’m singing from anger rather than from forgiveness; that I know he has wronged me. But thank you regardless! I guess it is still a good note, acceptance is always important!

Anne-Lise Andresen April 3, 2025 at 6:13 AM - Uninterested... let him go...painful but you are worth much more :) - hugs Reya Suri April 3, 2025 at 7:50 AM Would be easy if this poem wasn’t about the person who gave me life- though I am worth a person too. Xxxx

Heidi Sands April 3, 2025 at 4:12 AM Thought provoking and well expressed poem :) Reya Suri April 3, 2025 at 7:50 AM Thank you Heidi!! I’m glad you like this!!

Deb M April 3, 2025 at 2:19 AM Hi Reya….what an amazing write ….powerful! Debx Reya Suri April 3, 2025 at 7:51 AM Thank you Deb!! Love your energy xxx

Karen Jones April 3, 2025 at 1:25 AM This is deep and like emotional sparring. I love the energy of this and the optimism despite negativity! Reya Suri April 3, 2025 at 7:52 AM I guess the last verse is pretty optimistic! Never hurts to kill them with kindness!

Ink Empress April 3, 2025 at 12:41 AM It's never a nice feeling to be forsaken in misery, feeling alone and shunned by the ones that we long to feel our pain and challenges we fight ... your way with words is profound and flows very well! And youv expressed so very well here! I especially felt "Not a day by without the wonder Of the lack of sentiment you bring" so soulful! Pleasure visiting your page today dear Reya! Sending you light always Reya Suri April 3, 2025 at 7:54 AM Thank you so much, Ink! I always look forward to comments you’ve left. The challenges we fight are what I try to put in my work! Glad you love it xxx

Nette Onclaud April 2, 2025 at 10:35 PM this is real talk; hard hitting snd deep...i like your poetic style, reya! Reya Suri April 3, 2025 at 7:48 AM Thank you, Nette! I like to be slightly brutal with my work; glad you enjoy it!

Gershon Wolf April 2, 2025 at 10:07 PM Stirs up many thoughts and emotions, Reva. That's what a hard look at reality will do. ~ Gershon Reya Suri April 3, 2025 at 7:47 AM Thank you Gershon! Indeed, this was a painful write.