A Density of Mind

Last night there was a star stumbling in the sky
Mumbling like an imbecile cuz it was high
Each disrespectful word
Was totally absurd
It makes me wonder... what is wrong with this guy?

He has no clue how to write poems that make sense
Guess I'll chalk it up to his mind being dense
He's a turkey and a pig
or better yet, a prig
For lacking the quality of effulgence

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Date: 11/14/2022 3:56:00 PM
Hey Jenna I’m a bit confused with these Limericks, can’t make any sense of them whatsoever! Wait a minute, oh I see! you’re writing in an Anti-revolving helios menippean satire style, I’m really slow off the mark today sorry! cheers David
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/14/2022 4:10:00 PM
Haha, David. You are definitely not slow. Helios menippean is more like mean mean mean. I love your take on this issue and thank you.
Date: 11/14/2022 1:08:00 PM
So true Jenna! Well done!
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/14/2022 1:11:00 PM
Thanks, Tania. Ugliness begets ugliness.
Date: 11/14/2022 12:50:00 PM
We haven't had a hanging in Soup Creek for a while, guess I'd better head up to Boot Hill and start digging a hole lol. Tom
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/15/2022 7:37:00 AM
Probably, ok. Set him on fire.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/14/2022 3:38:00 PM
I feel for the vultures, surely they'd get food poisoning lol.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/14/2022 1:10:00 PM
A spot ON Boot Hill says you're thinking like the mayor, but a spot in some gully says you're thinking like the undertaker. Speaking as the owner of the saloon, I say let the vultures feast somewhere OUT of town.
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Tania Kitchin
Date: 11/14/2022 1:06:00 PM
Yes, that would be great Tom!
Date: 11/14/2022 12:02:00 PM
Good one. I suspect most of us feel this way about him, Jenna, but we simply do not know how to address this problem in a constructive manner. I'm certain he feels like he is a very competent wordsmith.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/14/2022 12:22:00 PM
No doubt that's what he thinks. I guess the best way to deal with one who has a narcissistic attitude is to stop addressing his misconduct, and in so doing... he will have no soap box on which to stand.
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