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:::A Day In May:::

Enter sleep, for a little while somnambulism, in the tulips Wake up but unable to smile compost pillows oh so putrid Maggots tasting, awfully vile magic mushrooms very lucid Uh-oh a pain, thistles or piles grows rapidly, hell I’m rooted A Lay for A Day In May Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Andrea Dietrich how many syllables 8x8 08/05/22

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/16/2022 8:29:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a creative/fun write. Have a blessed day writing away.........................

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/16/2022 9:13:00 AM

Thank you Paula, an abstract fun write indeed, I just kinda went tripping with my muse on this one, cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/15/2022 2:07:00 PM

i can see you put a lot of thought into this one. Unfortunately, I don't do well with interpreting abstract poetry . I bet you'd have scored higher with another judge! Thanks for participating and congrats in my contest.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/15/2022 2:16:00 PM

No problem Andrea, to my own detriment I tend to put my own abstract thoughts into poems even for contests, I totally get what your saying, thanks for the mention, cheers David

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/12/2022 12:24:00 PM

Great rhyming poem - should i rather say - supercalifragilisticexpialadocious! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/13/2022 1:22:00 AM

Thank you Jennifer, a lot of syllables in that word, hmmm, could I fit it into a monoku, seems like a challenge, I’d need lots of magic mushrooms first, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/8/2022 10:43:00 AM

David, you wrote a quite intriguing and thought-provoking poem. Your metaphors and great wording shed more enchantment on this writing, my best wishes for the contest.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/8/2022 11:33:00 AM

Thank you Lasaad, this one is a little abstract and psychedelic, but gives the reader a little deeper insight into how the conscious can interpret and tap into the bizarre dreamworld, cheers David