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Have you ever been hiking

Out in the woods

When this creepy feeling

Scares you real good?


Afraid to look round

Don't know what's behind

Oh don't be so silly!

Everything's fine!


The sound of a twig

Snapping in two

Your heart starts pounding

You shake in your shoes


A flicker of light

Through the towering pines

Saw something moved

Was it just in my mind?


It happens again

So I whirl myself 'round

There right before me

My brother the clown


Laughing and chuckling

Under the pines

This badass prankster

Kid brother of mine


He teases me still

Bout the look on my face

After all these years

He still can't erase


One day my turn

For revenge will arrive

And brother oh brother

I hope he survives!


© Jack Ellison 2012

Have you ever been hiking Out in the woods When this creepy feeling Scares you real good? Afraid to look round Don't know what's behind Oh don't be so silly! Everything's fine! The sound of a twig Snapping in two Your heart starts pounding You shake in your shoes A flicker of light Through the towering pines Saw something move Was it just in my mind? It happens again So I whirl myself 'round There right before me My brother the clown Laughing and chuckling Under the pines This badass prankster Kid brother of mine He teases me still Bout the look on my face After all these years He still can't erase One day my turn For revenge will arrive And brother oh brother I hope he survives! © Jack Ellison 2012

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Date: 3/27/2018 12:36:00 AM
Growing up with three brothers, I know the feeling too. No clowns for me on my hikes please! Always, Laura
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Date: 3/27/2018 5:21:00 AM
Nine sisters, no brothers and I was the youngest... spoiled??? You betcha!!! LOL XOX
Date: 11/7/2012 10:57:00 AM
Ha ha I know that feeling. I have 4 brothers who still like to wind me up. Good read, made me laugh :)
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Date: 11/7/2012 1:25:00 PM
All brothers do this kind of stuff... it's their job! LOL Thanks for dropping by, Miss Sarah! Hugs, Jack xox
Date: 10/24/2012 12:19:00 AM
Revenge costs too much - I enjoy witnessing unequivocal karma - J.A.B. %
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Date: 10/24/2012 4:59:00 AM
LOL! I still say revenge is SWEET at any cost! Cheers!
Date: 10/23/2012 7:56:00 PM
Hi Jack,,,i'm not hiking anytime soon.... the ending of your poem is interesting.... enjoyed...pd
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Jack Ellison
Date: 10/24/2012 4:58:00 AM
Especially as Halloween draws near! LOL Those ghoulies will be out in full force! LOL HUgs, Jack xxx
Date: 10/23/2012 8:46:00 AM
you have to look out for those big foot fellows Jack, they're worst than our, pixies and fairies, i bet your brother will find out, when you are in a mind...good poem,
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Jack Ellison
Date: 10/23/2012 10:07:00 AM
Thanks Harry for dropping by my friend! Have a great day!
Date: 10/23/2012 8:00:00 AM
What no romance? I was getting good at those comments... Heavy sigh... If your brothers getting older don't scare him too much... You might send him to the happy hunting ground. Tremendous Halloween poem... Not too edgy... just right... PS I left you another comment on A Kiss...
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Jack Ellison
Date: 10/23/2012 8:14:00 AM
Aha... but you didn't hear the rest of my story! Later met up with this gorgeous blonde...
Date: 10/23/2012 7:25:00 AM
Yes, and this Halloween's the perfect time to get him back! Can I be there to watch, record, then post on facebook, youtube and instagram? Haha
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Jack Ellison
Date: 10/23/2012 7:29:00 AM
Absolutely... I'll leave the light on for ya! LOL
Date: 10/23/2012 6:46:00 AM
Beautiful poem. Love it. It's so picturesque. I immediately remembered my hiking in the wood. Best wishes, Larisa
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Date: 10/23/2012 7:11:00 AM
Glad I could remind you of your walks in the woods, Larisa! Hugs, Jack

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