A Country Wedding

Hello jack Horne, oh how i feel for the pregnant girl as she cries,as the groom waves to the crowd.Have a nice day my friend.

WoW! You tell it like it often is. The groom is a cad. Both women will feel the burn before long. Great job. Bravo and congrats. God Bless, JB

Back with congrats for Jack!!! Lots of "a" assonance in my line. haha

Jack congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this wonderful Senryu. Hope your mom is doing okay and you too of course!

Great last line...I could see the rest of the story! Best to you...Jeanne

Poor girl - clever write, not up to front husband - Too late for all! Hugs, Jennifer.

Great Turn in the final line, Jack. I am wondering like Jan if she is the groom's "bit" on the side! I just took her as a woman in the crowd who did not share the couple's good fortune.

Oh, wow, how fast the brakes screeched on this one. Wow! Well done!

I see this as a sad tragedy of the father leaving this poor girl to raise their child on her own while he plans a life with his desire who is probably completely unaware of the situation. His dark heart may ruin all their lives. A suspenseful and dramatic senryu Jack. So well conceived. I think this will be very successful in the contest. : )

hmmm was she his bit on the side Jack lol :-) hugs Jan xx

The pregnant girl is a reminder to the bride & groom of things to come! On the other hand, she could have wished to have been in their place! ~ Regards // paul