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A Candid Rainscape

I watch the water trickle down my blank canvas, The whole world is crying today... Nature has water-washed the Earth green, The land looks fresh, as if awakened by a magic touch, I trace the cold mist with my fingertips, as the dark clouds are drawn towards the half bright sun... Raindrops jump and splash in brand new muddy puddles. Lilies look lovelier and jasmines jive joyfully, Daisies wear dewy dimples, even as the merry marigolds seem to melt... And on that faraway mountain, in a summer cottage, those roses blush redder when the rain kisses them. My eyes glisten and my lips spread in a smile, while I brush away those few drops left to complete my candid dreamscape... 06/29/17

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Len Gasun

Date: 1/16/2023 7:44:00 AM

Daisy wear dewy dimples.... Fantastic panorama and poem! I love it a lot and enjoyed every line. Congratulations on your win! Thanks for sharing. Blessings to you always my dear friend.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/16/2023 3:25:00 AM

Congratulations on this winning work. Way to go. Sara

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/2/2021 8:06:00 AM

And on that faraway mountain, in a summer cottage, those roses blush redder when the rain kisses them. Beautiful description. Congratulations!

John Watt

Date: 10/23/2020 9:58:00 AM

Today is a misty, cloudy grey day, Jo. I enjoyed reading this so much, contemplating nature washing the earth as the world cries. Your dreamscape is filled with hope, a subject I cherish in poetry. Beautiful. Enjoy your day ~ John

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 8/22/2017 12:44:00 PM

Very beautiful poem, Jo. Your way w/words is phenomenal. This coulda easily been an Alliteration form poem. It moves w/vivaciousness and charm. Great lines throughout ... lilies look lovelier and jasmines jive joyfully ... daisies wear dewy dimples, even as the merry marigolds seem to melt. Stellar bright poetry from such a gifted poetess. An instant fave. Love and smiles.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/13/2017 8:20:00 PM

this is REALLY nice, Jo. Did you not enter it as a landscape entry anyway? It's so good. FAVED!

Lewis Raynes

Date: 7/4/2017 9:35:00 PM

Great write Jo, had to read it a few times and it gets better and better each time. Great stuff.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 7/3/2017 4:57:00 PM

This is sublime and such wonderful description! Love the consonance and rhythm, and the extraordinary picture it paints in my mind ... I want to go! Congrats on the placement, Jo - love this - a fav for sure! :-)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/3/2017 4:28:00 PM

This is lovely, Jo! Congrats on your win. Janice

Afzal Nusker

Date: 7/1/2017 1:27:00 AM

Definitely this beauty would have scored high in Kim's contest. What a nostalgic poem, Jo.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/30/2017 8:43:00 AM

Marvelous painting with words sister, Jo! Today with temperatures up to 45 I wish some raindrops of the leaves of my flowers!

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/30/2017 7:22:00 AM

Quite a dream, Jo. I love marigolds! I think they are beautiful:) Like this dreamscape:)

John Lawless

Date: 6/30/2017 7:16:00 AM

Ah, he resplendent aftermath of a spring shower....nicely done Jo...with a few poetic devices neatly tucked into the garden...

Chris Green

Date: 6/30/2017 5:54:00 AM

Jo, this was enchantingly beautiful. You have captured the essence of nature with all of its colors and charm in this wonderful piece. Now didn't you just a little while ago tell Darren that you were struggling to write too???? I think not, this poem is proof of that.