David William Breidenthal Poet Free verse

A Blissful Lifetime

Rowdiness drives though your eyes 
It builds a freeway, leading to consistent roads 
I can’t explain your stunning beauty, making my passion jam-packed
I can’t explain this heartfelt feeling inside—it’s so inconceivable  
Your nature is like a vermillion, impeccable rose; your scent is gratifying 
I can’t explain this addiction I have planted inside—I want to overdose 
On your genuine desires (that is most appealing)
That last a lifetime, pouring forth glee 
Upon my contemptuous sorrows and kisses 

Your tone of voice burns like a wildfire…penetrating me like crazy
It tears down the habitation that once existed and now gone
I can’t explain this fishy sensation plunging inside—it’s so absurd
Your nature reflects a treacherous passion like a whirling sea
I can’t explain this admiration I have drilling inside—caught in the waves of motion
Pounding lightly and ardently
It only lasts a few milliseconds… pouring forth notions
Upon my overwhelmed mind with gouges and blisses 

These excruciating scars left a mark
That lasts a century, accumulating my glory  

Running over my heart …tearing me apart…
Pounding me with affection…showing me the direction 
Where I could drive through the rowdiness of your eyes

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Jake Ponce May 7, 2014 at 1:01 AM 12th on the list: There's a painful playfulness about it that lingered even after I was done reading it. I like the use of simile to heavily express your feelings on the subject matter and, maybe on a bad day, I would have written something this beautiful as well. David William Breidenthal May 18, 2014 at 5:25 PM On my bad days, I don;t normally write that good, but thank you...this one is one of my favorites I've written. It's different and unique and was fun to write during my 9th grade year.

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire April 6, 2012 at 9:10 PM Dear David, An Extremely Well Written Free Verse YOUR Emotions clearly Seen Superb Pen, with LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER, YOUR Eternal Liege...HG - P.S. I am a big Fan of YOUR Sister Laura POETRY runs in YOUR Family Keep Writing...HG David William Breidenthal April 7, 2012 at 1:58 PM Thanks, HGarvey! :) Have a great Sat.!