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a bee invaded our car in nineteen fifty four while we were driving to the jersey shore flew in my open back window of our two tone ford custom pea green top black bottom hurtling down the highway four kids two adults doing sixty our kid arms outside the windows flailing and pushing the wind no cares must have looked from above like some giant green beetle lotsa wiggly white legs once the bee was inside it was havoc screaming and screeching kids curled up in fear in the rear mom and dad barking out orders we knew it had a stinger it wanted to get us stab us never really saw its sticky spear scary when needles are near it buzzed all about for a minute or two up to the windshield back near my ear mom tried to thwack it with her home journal but missed it disappeared we all wanted to kill it that is what you do with bees waited and waited no bee then in a fury it came out from under the front seat hiding in a sea of springs plotting for its moment its chance to escape we must have gone twenty miles with it in our car so out it came buzzed a bit then flew out my window gone we all took a sigh of relief the villain excommunicated after the yapping stopped silence for a few miles then i got a slow sadness how will it find its home it was very very far away i thought if i was the bee maybe i would feel lost i remember when mom found me in wanamakers in toys mom leaned over the front seat and said his home is everywhere huh that was enough for me even though i had no clue what it all meant what to do my first lesson in empathy taught by a teeny thing so wee a bee free verse 74 lines 326 words Pen illustration G. Gaul

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Date: 1/1/2023 11:01:00 AM
Back with "Congratulations" on this New win. A lovely write/story. Hope you had a great/blessed Christmas. Have a Blessed New Year 2023.......................
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Greg Gaul
Date: 1/2/2023 7:19:00 PM
Blesst by having a poet like you as a friend. You always see the best in all of us and I see the loving kindness in you. Be well in 2023, have wonderous year.
Date: 1/1/2023 5:02:00 AM
A great experience beautifully narrated and sung. Congratulations! Wish You A Prosperous New Year!
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Greg Gaul
Date: 1/2/2023 7:25:00 PM
I so appreciate your thoughts and comments. Have a great 2023!
Date: 1/1/2023 2:13:00 AM
Empathy is, surely, priceless – God bless you and Congratulations. Love, Gina
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Greg Gaul
Date: 1/2/2023 7:23:00 PM
Gina, empathy is a big part of Christian life, thank you for acknowledging its signal importance. Have a great new year and thank you for your visit.
Date: 7/19/2022 2:53:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning, so creative, and well-written poem
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Greg Gaul
Date: 7/19/2022 5:22:00 AM
Kind of you to comment. Thanks for your visit.
Date: 7/18/2022 2:10:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. "a bee" is a lovely write/story. I love this one. Have a blessed day writing away...................
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Greg Gaul
Date: 7/19/2022 5:23:00 AM
Your visits and comments are always appreciated.
Date: 7/17/2022 11:20:00 AM
Excellent work placing 12th out of 55 in my contest! I loved the personal story, that really set yours apart!
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Greg Gaul
Date: 7/18/2022 5:57:00 AM
Thank you for your most thoughtful and encouraging response to a contestant who placed last in your contest. I am impressed that you demonstrated such empathy to a poet who you really don't know, something like the bee in my simple poem. Thanks for taking the time in what is mostly a thankless task, hosting.
Date: 2/6/2022 5:44:00 AM
Enjoyed reading! That happened to me several times. The last time was this past year. Had us pulled over on a strange road, far, far, from home. You should have seen me before I hopped out the car - a total wreck! I'm allergic to the little creatures with the tremendous sting. Thanks for the walk down memory lane as I can laugh about it now.
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Greg Gaul
Date: 2/6/2022 7:11:00 AM
You are so connected to this. Nature and us are all in this together, this experience and similar ones. Thank you for your comment and sharing. Namaste.
Date: 2/1/2022 8:16:00 PM
Great invasion and relief. Beautiful writing. Congratulations!
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Date: 2/2/2022 4:07:00 AM
Was hoping it might create a little buzz. Thanks for the visit.
Date: 1/31/2022 8:30:00 AM
What a fantastic story, Greg! Life interrupted, pondered, taken personal and compassionately so! A fave!
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Greg Gaul
Date: 1/31/2022 11:38:00 AM
Kim, so nice of you to buzz around and land so gently on my poem. Most kind.

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