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' MISSING THE OLD DAYS '

Life, Breath - Taken One leg gone Perished in deathbed Diabetes murdered Grandpa Benumbed by ill - gash's agony perforating - dulled Gold medal won after the day of his death reminds me of his only heart memoirs...

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Date: 9/7/2011 8:34:00 AM
Sad story, gold lining tinged with a cloud, well expressed in an interesting form.
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Date: 8/5/2011 7:15:00 AM
congrats on your win in the contest with this exceptional write cory
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Date: 8/2/2011 10:57:00 AM
Many congratulations, Jun-jun : )
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Date: 8/2/2011 1:20:00 AM
yeahey, jun..heaps of congrats on your amazing award!! :) huggs!
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Date: 8/2/2011 1:00:00 AM
Thanks, jun-jun, for your kind words.Congrats..SJ
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Date: 8/1/2011 9:02:00 PM
My congratulations on the second place win in the contest of carol,jun-jun
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Date: 8/1/2011 9:01:00 PM
My congratulations on the second place win in the contest of carol,jun-jun
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Date: 8/1/2011 8:46:00 PM
Powerful, jun-jun.! Much said in few words!
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Date: 8/1/2011 6:38:00 PM
Sad things do happen, sickness kills, great poem mate of Grandpa still, good on ya, Don
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Date: 8/1/2011 6:29:00 PM
A winning congratulations! Caryl
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Date: 8/1/2011 5:44:00 PM
Very nice! Congrats on your 2nd place win in the contest.
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Date: 8/1/2011 3:12:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in my latest contest Jun-Jun. It was very hard choosing the placements as I loved them all. Have a wonderful week. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/1/2011 3:02:00 PM
congrats jun-jun on your spectacular second place win with this wonderful write luv.. a true treasure..
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Date: 7/30/2011 12:17:00 PM
I have never tried this form I think-- very interesting take on it-- and I have to agree, diabetes sure is a cruel disease-- I am sorry you lost your lolo to it-- your last line gives this such a bittersweet ending...
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Date: 7/30/2011 1:32:00 AM
Jun-Jun Now I need to read Fibonacci form! How have you been? The formatted form looks so nice and creative. Of course the content has deep meaning! Thank you for sharing. My warmest regards to you! Dalila
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Date: 7/29/2011 10:24:00 PM
Touching and emotional, a powerful write. Thanks for sharing.
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