3:28 Am

The stillest slice of night cuts deep
  Alone with only mirrored thoughts
     Reflecting all that softly weep 
  The stillest slice of night cuts deep
A splintered plank, now blindly walked 
  The stillest slice of night cuts deep
  Alone with only mirrored thoughts

               -09 Aug 2014-

introspectionnighttriolet

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John Lawless

October 10, 2016 at 5:58 PM

..."A splintered plank, now blindly walked". Love that line. Nice job with the "Tricky Triolet" form

Sandra Haight

October 9, 2016 at 3:49 PM

Very dark and a well-written Triolet, David. Congratulations on your fine win. Sandra

Janis Medders Tobechi

October 8, 2016 at 9:16 PM

Love the triolet form. Nicely penned. Congrats.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

August 16, 2014 at 11:14 AM

Short but so effective with what you did here-- I really like how this has such a haunting and foreboding feel to it... congrats on your win, David!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

August 16, 2014 at 1:36 AM

Congrats on ur winning wonderful write David!

Andrea Dietrich

August 15, 2014 at 11:09 PM

wow, GREAT DARK imagery!!! A triolet well crafted. Congrats for your win.

Poet Destroyer A

August 15, 2014 at 8:51 PM

David, congratulations....Linda

Faye Gibson

August 15, 2014 at 1:49 PM

Congratulations on your winning placement, David.

Charlotte Puddifoot

August 15, 2014 at 6:41 AM

it's rare that I place a repetitive form poem such as a triolet, but I thought this was a very atmospheric little piece, and somehow the repetition reinforced the unsettling tone of the poem - well done, and congrats on your win in my contest! :)