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1. Kelly Lune: silk rose under dome opaque glass thwarted love preserved 2. Jack Collom Lune: the faded corsage under a dusty glass dome— missed spring ball NOT FOR CONTEST POET'S NOTES The lune (aka American haiku) created by New York-based poet Robert Kelly (1935–) in the 1960s consists of 5-3-5 syllables (the 13 syllables correspond to the 13 lunar months), and the shape resembles a crescent moon hence it is never centred on the page. Later, poet Jack Collom (1931–2017) came up with the word-count-variant, The Lune, that is more popular today, namely, 3-5-3 words per line representing a gibbous moon. No cutting word required (it may employ enjambment); and any subject matter (reference to nature is not a prerequisite). Punctuation, capitalisation, and rhyme is the prerogative of the poet.  The following poetic forms are akin in design to the Lune: Empty Moon, by Alan Mudd (a 9 word poem—3 words per line); Leaf, by Joseph Braun & Marielle Grenade-Willis (The Braun leaf is an eleven syllable couplet: 6-5. The Grenade-Willis leaf is an eleven syllable tercet: 3-5-3); elevenie or elfchen, German meaning little eleven, (1-2-3-4-5 syllables per line with specific structure requirements); and triplet. The triplet is a three word poem—usually no capital letters or punctuation is used. As a linguistic geometry the triplet may be seen as a triangle in two ways: 1. each word is a leg, or 2. each word is an angle. One of the principle insights one gains when producing triplets is a functional knowledge of how (and under which circumstances) words form especially reliable structural bonds; it often enjoins adjectives to a special noun. A famous triplet by Aldous Huxley: Brave New World

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Date: 12/21/2021 1:25:00 PM
It is a pleasure to finally read these, Suzette.
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Date: 11/7/2021 4:38:00 AM
You have written beautifully well with a long note. Great work!
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Date: 10/31/2021 5:00:00 AM
Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. I enjoyed reading them. The moon phases have a serious effect on all living.. Sara
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