Carolyn Devonshire Poet Limerick

22-Year-Old Deal Breaker

He proposed, wanted me to be his wife
But I knew his son would cause too much strife
     A grown man with no goals
     His father he controls
I gently said, “No, I want a good life.”

In bed he lies, playing video games
“No work to be found,” this lazy son claims
     Blames the economy
     Acts irresponsibly
Sticks to his avatars; I use friends’ names 



*Entry for the Deal Killer contest

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Jack Horne October 22, 2020 at 12:23 PM lol, enjoyed reading this, but I see it took me to an old one, when I'd clicked on a new post...

Duncan Chappell November 22, 2011 at 9:34 PM see how much the world has turned just in the past 10 year or so ,so quick they become the wrongs never the right love duncan and ceizar xx

Judy Ball November 18, 2011 at 12:51 PM Great job here Caroline. Too many people allow their children to control their lives and so as the child grows up he thinks he has the right to call all the shots for his parents and they should supply all his wants and needs for as long as they live. The parents have no life because they gave it all away to irresponsible shallow greedy children. The kids have no life because they never learned to fend for themselves. God Bless, JB

Jack Horne November 16, 2011 at 12:36 PM A sad and heart felt write, my friend

Robert Johnson November 16, 2011 at 10:38 AM When we marry, it's not just one. It's the whole darn family. SON OF A GUN!

Andrea Dietrich November 15, 2011 at 7:49 PM CArolyn,this is a great way to do that contest!! One thing, I think you mistakenly called it haiku when it's limerick form. I sure hope I can come up with something as clever.

Russell Sivey November 15, 2011 at 4:59 PM Wow, that's awful that a young man created so much friction, that you could not establish a relationship with his father! Makes me sad too! Well it must have been not to be! Great work!!

Daver Austin November 15, 2011 at 2:09 PM You nailed it, Carolyn. There are a lot of these irresponsible dealers around these days. A sure winner. Love, daver

Tony Lane November 15, 2011 at 1:21 PM That's the run don't walk sign. Tony