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["103 First Floor West first appeared in Poetry On-line, the World's Largest Poetry Society, 2007. It was reprinted in my book, Ashes on the Snow, Createspace, 2010.]

103 First Floor West

He thinks of dreams he often dreamed
In early morn, while yet it seemed
The young looked up to him with searching eyes
As deep and distant as the western skies,
He weighs again the words he wished to say
Long before the shadows stole his day
And robbed him of the chance to prove
Experience, purloined his will to move
While tender light mounted waiting sky
And birthed small feats to pile high
At last.  He felt his soul pressing down
And shaken to the bowels of barren ground
With sobs and sounds of folly fearing
Ahead the dusk so fast appearing;
No one seeks his wizened face again,
But he still swears the time was best
Before he reached the final crest.


FIRST PLACE WINNER
"All Yours" Poetry Contest
sponsored by Brian Strand

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May 23, 2021
"Most Creative Poem" Contest
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Ashley Avatar
June 3, 2021 at 6:57 PM
Dear L Milton, your poem is as potent as it is poignant. Your poetic pen beautifully expresses emotions with vivid imagery and affecting word choices. Congratulations for your wonderful win in Juliet's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Hankins Avatar
June 3, 2021 at 7:01 PM
Thanks so much, Susan. I really appreciated your read and your thoughtful comment. Much encouraging.
Goldsmith Avatar
May 24, 2021 at 9:26 AM
Congratulations on your win. A creative write. Never know when our time is up. Have a blessed day/week.................
Hankins Avatar
May 24, 2021 at 1:12 PM
Thanks so much for your comment and your complimentary comment.
Ligon Avatar
May 23, 2021 at 7:11 PM
Thanks for entering your original poem, L. Milton. Your poem is poignant and very well written. This was a difficult contest to judge. Keep up the creativity.
Hankins Avatar
May 23, 2021 at 7:14 PM
Thanks so very much, Juliet, for your recognition. I appreciate it.
Beaufort Avatar
April 4, 2021 at 2:27 PM
Time is short for all of us. That’s sure true.
Hankins Avatar
April 4, 2021 at 2:40 PM
The old fellow had regrets. I should hope that none of us reach that conclusion at the end of our days. Thanks for your kind comment.
Rose  Avatar
February 20, 2021 at 9:22 AM
wow, very intense in its feeling and emotion, how easy it is for us to live in a dream world, instead of stark reality. Thank you for this well written poem. So many multi layered meaning in every phrase.
Hankins Avatar
February 20, 2021 at 11:46 AM
So true, Mystic Rose Rose. Also, so happy you enjoyed the poem and found it meaningful.
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