The Clouds Torn Down

"The clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire"
With God's presence in dusk and dawn — 
Do whispered moans damn this mortal bower?  

For in each stroke, dark is nigher
Though God's forgiving in dusk and dawn — 
"The clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire"

"The clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire..."
"The clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire..."

"The clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire"
Still God's light in dusk and dawn — 
While I grieve for the tongues in us circling liars.

My roots in rain seem more the crier
When God touches dusk and dawn — 
"The clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire"

"The clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire..."
"The clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire..."

Before I'm gone beneath my shiftless flower
God wipes her of both dusk and dawn — 
"The clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire"
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Date: 6/8/2025 5:13:00 PM
Oh, wow, thanks everyone!! I am just now seeing this!! Congrats to all you winners, too! <3 :)
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Date: 6/8/2025 9:32:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your creative write. Have a blessed day with your win.......
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Date: 6/8/2025 5:44:00 AM
very nicely penned, Congrats on your win
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Date: 6/7/2025 9:22:00 AM
Dear Paige, both the use of repetition and, striking yet tender, imagery in your poem created a captivating atmosphere.. one where I lingered with your multi-faceted verse in slow rereads that released revelations held within; emotional, physical, spiritual. Deep and creative, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 6/2/2025 11:19:00 PM
Wow it sounds like a song or a mantra. Profound one
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Date: 6/2/2025 5:39:00 PM
Compelling piece Paige. ""The clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire" mm, love it!
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Date: 6/2/2025 2:08:00 AM
I was going to write on this prompt too, its a beautiful and inspiring one and youv used it as a refrain in your stunning poem and made your lines flow in such a seamless manner! Pleasure reading this gem dear paige, beautiful soul! I hope you are doing well! Sending you light always
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Date: 6/2/2025 1:35:00 AM
Dear Paige, your poem mesmerised me. Your alliteration enforces your thoughts.
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Date: 6/1/2025 7:36:00 PM
The alliteration enhances the scope and pace of enthralling picture; how inventive. You have a gift for creativity, Paige.
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Date: 6/1/2025 12:59:00 PM
This is so cool! I could see more than one speaker, repeating! A most definite fave!
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Date: 6/1/2025 11:37:00 AM
This is very creative dear PAige.. nicely done..
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Date: 5/31/2025 7:30:00 PM
How creative, the alliteration furthers the depth and delivery of spellbinding imagery. Way to write, Paige! Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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