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Autumn Haiku - set of three Poetry Contest sponsored by Tania Kitchin Sept 2024

Signs of Autumn

a pomegranate’s
split vulnerability –
chinks in the armour

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an autumn sunrise –
a bird’s melodious song
breaks the morning hush 

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September memos –
sporadic lightning scribbles
on congested clouds

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Susan Lawrence

Date: 11/7/2024 7:24:00 AM

Yes yes yes ! So many beautiful deep emotions are conjured up by your imagery dear Paul ! My favorite - a pomegranate’s split vulnerability…. Brilliant and real . Big hugs dear friend . I admire you so very much . Love, Susan :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/9/2024 7:18:00 AM

PS...Some minutes ago I read Susan Ashley's "Animating Innate Vibrance", and the theme reminded me of you. I wonder what a collaboration between you two would be like! :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/9/2024 7:15:00 AM

What a pleasurable coincidence having my 2 favourite "Susans" commenting in quick succession! :) Thank you for stopping by with lovely, positive and encouraging comments, my friend. ~ Warm regards & Hugs & happy weekend // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/31/2024 9:41:00 AM

Dear Paul, wonderful poet friend, your golden pen shines in this strand of haiku! I love Fall and I adore each snapshot of September's transition from summer to autumn. "sporadic lightning scribbles/on congested clouds" -wow! That imagery, especially, leaves an indelible mark upon my imagination! Your poetic expression is always exquisite, my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 11/9/2024 7:09:00 AM

Thank you for this adorable feedback, dear Susan! In my younger days I loved summer most, but as time went by I realized that autumn too had much to give, especially where poetry is concerned. ~ Warm regards & hugs, my friend / paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/12/2024 1:27:00 PM

Ohhh this is so good! Wasn't this a contest already judged. Sure hope it is a win for you

Paul Callus
Date: 10/26/2024 2:41:00 PM

Thank you for liking, Andrea. Yes it was judged a while back, without any success. ~ Best regards & enjoy the weekend. // paul

Panagiota Romios

Date: 10/7/2024 12:11:00 PM

Always the poet who can pen beautiful Haikus. Your humble soul, I alwaus feel. Best wishes in the contest. Pamgie

Paul Callus
Date: 10/10/2024 3:35:00 PM

Thank you Pangie for your generous comments. As regards the contest I received an N/A...probably I broke all the rules :) Best regards // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/4/2024 6:53:00 AM

Tommy hasn't mentioned the pomegranates this year so the last frost much have killed all the blooms this past spring. I enjoyed reading your creative Haiku. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K

Paul Callus
Date: 10/10/2024 3:46:00 PM

At the moment our pomegranate trees a laden with fruit; I go for at least one a day, Sara. Thank you for stopping by. Best regards // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/29/2024 4:32:00 PM

you bring autumn's splendor on centerstage, paul.. . lovely ku as always!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/10/2024 3:43:00 PM

I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my haiku, Nette...thank you and warm regards my friend. // paul

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/29/2024 2:24:00 AM

I wonder if pomegranates split with the first thunder. Splendid imagery.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2024 6:05:00 AM

Thank you Victor. My grandfather used to say that pomegranates burst with thunder/bolts, but I think that inconsistent watering is usually to blame. Regards // paul

Ink Empress

Date: 9/28/2024 12:35:00 PM

I love so many lines and how picturesque your haiku are, especially “ split vulnerability “‘that line speaks to me! And is deep! “ breaks the morning hush ” beautiful! And so serene! “sporadic lightning scribbles on congested clouds” the subtle alliterations and word choices in the last haiku really stood out for me and is just very impressive! Well done! Pleasure reading your work always! Sending you light always

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2024 6:20:00 AM

Thank you Empress; your feedback too is most impressive! The 1st sentence is more or less what I could have commented on your latest poem which I just had the pleasure to read :) Warm regards // paul

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/27/2024 10:27:00 AM

Paul, these are so good! I especially love the visual feast of images in the third haiku as lightning scribbles on the clouds! Love the word "scribbles!" Best wishes for the contest. This is marvelous. Blessings to you!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2024 2:10:00 PM

Thank you for the generous comments, Sam; I'm pleased you enjoyed my humble offering. Regards & blessings // paul

Joseph May

Date: 9/27/2024 3:22:00 AM

"Sporadic lightning scribbles on congested clouds', Very nicely done Paul, GL in the contest

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2024 1:22:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Joseph. Best regards // paul

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 9/25/2024 11:07:00 AM

Hello Paul, I love the Autumn, I love Haikus, I love well written Haikus and yours meets all of my standards. - Blessings, My Friend, Daniel

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2024 2:04:00 PM

Thank you for the complimentary comments, Daniel. I have just read your baby shoes monoku, and I think it's awesome! ~ Best regards // paul

Gary Radice

Date: 9/25/2024 6:08:00 AM

I have to admit Paul that when it comes to poetry forms, haikus don’t tend to do it for me. That said, the two Soupers’ poetry I have just read right now (yours and Laura’s) have both been in the said form and I have to say both are just brilliant. The third of your haikus I think is particularly superb. It conjures up so much imagery. Very clever. Cheers - Gary

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2024 1:25:00 PM

Thank you for the positive and sincere feedback, Gary. Haiku does not appeal to all, but once you take to it you would never stay away from it! ~ Regards // paul