September Sixth with a Whisper

The day bled into dusk
as I sat by the window
and watched the sky
fall into shadows.
Trees silhouetted the yard.

Trees silhouetted the yard,
a late day of summer not yet fall
a feeling of nothingness
and I looked out the window
as the day passed with a whisper.

As the day passed with a whisper
the sky turned amber for a moment
and yard lights flickered stars.
A voice whispered
all good children must go inside.

All good children stepped inside
but now a sense of innocence was lost
how I remembered someone I barely knew
had just died three houses down
on the quiet side street.

On a quiet side street
my refuge sought
lost in refection
and the passage of time
as the day bled into dusk.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024


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Date: 9/9/2024 4:41:00 PM
This is touching in the way that children seem restrained at the very time of their adventutesome growth. Is childhood lost? Your poem is a solid strength of words
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Date: 9/9/2024 1:40:00 AM
How true that here in Malta it is neither summer nor winter, but something in between. Loved your structure. A fine poem.
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Date: 9/7/2024 2:32:00 PM
Very deep, even in abstract- enjoyed reading it
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Date: 9/7/2024 10:58:00 AM
I love the pattern you wrote this in . So clever. Also the feelings evoked by the fall
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Date: 9/7/2024 10:39:00 AM
I love how youv started every stanza with the last line of previous, and how youv painted imagery here is stunning too! Such a beautiful and heartfelt poem that also has a lyrical touch to it! Pleasure reading this! Sending you light always
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