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Poem written for and submitted to “My Dream Within A Dream Poetry Contest, “Constance La France, sponsor, September 8, 2025

MY DREAM WITHIN A DREAM

MY DREAM WITHIN A DREAM ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
untethered, silver cord, unseen, no gravity holding me down~ released into the velvet night, wisp of smoke above sleeping earth. I drift and ascend earth, a swirling blue marble, mottled canvas of greens and browns below, my life, a minute play. houses shrink to scattered dice cars like ants on endless trails lives lived at frantic pace tiny figures moving, unaware of my drifting gaze. ethereal realm reveals…what? death or a simple shedding, peeling away of earthly skin leaving only the soul? is this the space between thoughts? is this waking or, deeper yet, a Russian doll of verity? search for hand to pull me back. listen for voice to call my name. find only loneliness. is this drifting the only truth: life is a dream dreamt while dreaming.
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Date: 9/9/2025 7:06:00 AM
Dear Sara, what really moves me is how fearlessly you dive into those big philosophical questions. The "Russian doll of verity" - wow. You're exploring territory that most of us only glimpse in fleeting moments, and you've given it such beautiful, haunting language. Blessings, Sara, Daniel
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/9/2025 5:44:00 PM
thank you, Daniel, for your comments about my 'diving'. Your words are motivational and mean a great deal to me....have a blessed evening, Sara
Date: 9/9/2025 4:28:00 AM
Wow ~ superb
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/9/2025 5:43:00 PM
aww, thank y ou!
Date: 9/8/2025 6:54:00 PM
houses shrink to scattered dice… ethereal realm reveals…what? death or a simple shedding…is this waking or, deeper yet, a Russian doll of verity…very mice metaphors!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/9/2025 5:42:00 PM
many thanks, Kim!
Date: 9/8/2025 3:55:00 PM
Hi Sara, this is a really good one! The lines: "is this waking or, deeper yet, a Russian doll of verity?" express a real philosophical depth (a kinship with Poe’s "A Dream Within a Dream"). Your imagery is cinematic throughout. Excellent write. Best of luck with the contest.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/8/2025 5:57:00 PM
Wow, Mickey! Thank you for your wonderfully supportive words...and suggesting a kinship with Poe....you made my evening. I appreciate your enthusiasm...means a great deal to me, have a great evening, Sara
Date: 9/8/2025 2:05:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Great Picture... Good Luck... We both did this one. Have a blessed day writing away..............
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/8/2025 5:56:00 PM
thank you, dear Paula, for your visit and support. I'll be reading your poem in a bit...enjoy your evening, hugs, Sara
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