Gone

She was the brightest ray of sunshine
That warmed a chilly day
A gentle cool breeze
That could blow those blues away

What happened to that sweet girl
That turned her heart black
Hatred in her soul
She walked away and never looked back!

changehatesilencerhyme

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/16/2025 6:17:00 AM

Oh how we hurt when those kids we’ve known follow the wrong path…our hope is that they come back to a sound mind. Hugs

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/7/2025 7:12:00 PM

Dear Deb, your intriguing poem, and it’s title, is poignant and haunting. You capture the beauty of the girl and the heartbreak of her actions.. the mystery of why and how and what “turned her heart black” is left open for us to ponder… masterfully done, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

CayCay Jennings

Date: 9/5/2025 3:16:00 AM

Tell me more, tell me more (Grease, anyone?) - I know I'm meant to fill in the blank, but I want 'it' given to me! I wanna know why I feel like crying. Each word I write proves what an effective poem you penned. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/2/2025 9:15:00 PM

Beautiful and sad all at the same time, Deb. Truly, hate changes the heart. So sad. Thank you for this poignant poem and message . Sending you blessings.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/2/2025 7:38:00 PM

So sad.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/2/2025 12:22:00 PM

Oh!! Whoa!! Sad one. That scenario does happen quite often especially a teenage girl who meets up with the wrong person. I found your take on the situation quite interesting. Thank you for sharing this one with us. Sara K

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 9/2/2025 8:15:00 AM

I enjoy this poem it leaves with an interesting question. I always like a mystery. The rhytm marches in unison with the finality of leaving.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 9/1/2025 4:54:00 PM

oh, how sad. I've seen situations like the one you described...when I was teaching so often I'd see a sweet gal or guy turn 'black' on the inside. So perplexing. NICELY done, Deb...hugs from Texas, Sara

Deb M
Date: 9/2/2025 6:01:00 AM

Thanks so much Sara….much ppreciated! Debx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/1/2025 1:52:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet sad "Gone" write. Life has many questions with few answers. I have written about people and how they can hurt others. I do not understand it. Have a blessed day writing away..............

Deb M
Date: 9/2/2025 6:00:00 AM

Thanks Paula….Debx