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Getting the Point

Getting the Point

A stitch 
a stitch
to silence the witch
A sharp sharp needle
to make her twitch

Two eyes of coal
with grey grey hair
Eyeballs gone
and still she stares

Earless rabbit 
She pulled them off
His mouth sewed shut
So he can’t cough

Riddle me 
riddle me
Why skin so pale
inside my brain
She pokes a nail

She’s as real
as real can be
a creature crawling
inside of me

Poke the poker
Jab me in the eye
Stitch my lips closed
so that I can’t cry.

October is around the corner. I thought I would create a Halloween state of mind.

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Bill Baker Date: 9/28/2023 2:45:00 PM Well, you certainly stirred the pot, my friend. Good start for the Halloween season. It had a hocus pocus feel to it. Write On! Bill Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/1/2023 6:41:00 AM Thanks Bill, your visits are appreciated.

Christina Bowring Date: 9/26/2023 6:47:00 AM Gosh this is quite scary and if it was a horror movie I would be hiding behind a cushion Richard! I too, am thinking there’s more to this than meets the eye (although technically she’s got no eyeballs and that poor little rabbit!) ‘a creature crawling inside me’ Yuck! Great write.Keep them coming :) :) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/26/2023 11:57:00 AM Thanks Christina.

Tom Woody Date: 9/25/2023 7:29:00 AM I don't celebrate Halloween but this poem sure has its scary side, though stanza five makes me think there's more going on here than what's on the surface Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/25/2023 7:35:00 AM Thanks for reading and commenting. I wrote the piece from a picture prompt.

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 9/24/2023 12:22:00 PM lol so you did Richard, shivery moments here, :) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/25/2023 7:12:00 AM Thanks for reading and commenting.

Shadow Hamilton Date: 9/24/2023 11:33:00 AM love it Richard hugs Shadow Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/25/2023 7:12:00 AM So nice to have you visit. Hugs Rick.

Gershon Wolf Date: 9/23/2023 9:06:00 PM Great job: Mission accomplished, Richard --- and so much more! This is a real mind-bender, if you ask me. Bravo, gw Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/24/2023 6:05:00 AM Thanks Gershwin.

Susan Lawrence Date: 9/23/2023 8:50:00 AM Richard, So Creepy !! Aagh !! Graphic details building up until the final punch at the end.Great Halloween entry !! Hugs, Susan :) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/23/2023 2:03:00 PM Thanks and hugs back.;0)

Alexis Y. Date: 9/23/2023 7:34:00 AM WoW! Richard, This is so well written write for. " Halloween". I was not expecting that last line. Like always great job. Have a great weekend:-) Alexis Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/23/2023 2:04:00 PM Much appreciated Alexis.

Kim Rodrigues Date: 9/22/2023 4:33:00 PM Wow! A great job with special and personal effects! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/23/2023 6:58:00 AM Thanks Kim.

Silent One Date: 9/22/2023 3:22:00 PM This is perfect for Halloween.. very graphic poem. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/23/2023 6:58:00 AM Much appreciated.

Jan Allison Date: 9/22/2023 3:00:00 PM eek this certainly is scary especially the poor rabbit! Great to see your fun side Rick! hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/23/2023 6:59:00 AM Thanks Jan. Hugs Rick.