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Aveolar In Crescent

moon's staff wanes 
whilst blood emptying —
distant swerve

angstdeathdesireintrospectionkisshaiku

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Alesia Leach

Date: 5/23/2025 5:15:00 PM

This haiku lands like a breath caught mid-exhale--eerie, elegant, and quietly cutting. "Moon's staff wanes / whilst blood emptying" feels like a spell and a surrender. Haunting in just a handful of syllables.

Anonomus Scorpio

Date: 12/25/2024 3:01:00 PM

I have read this at least a dozen tumes since you wrote it... I keep coming back to the same thought. Slow and deep breaths are what it keeps making me think of. As its phases shift they're just like lungs moving in and out. Doubt that is what you meant but it is what it makes me feel, I like this one very much! Regards A.S.

Silent One

Date: 10/14/2024 12:19:00 PM

Wonderful vivid imagery..

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 10/7/2024 10:10:00 PM

I've heard of the 'blood moon'. I like this different view of the moon.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/7/2024 10:59:00 AM

Paige, this poem shimmers like the "swerve" of the moon's light. Very creative word use and images. Blessings to you!

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 10/4/2024 7:24:00 AM

Dear Paige! How hauntingly beautiful! I love how you capture the moon's ethereal light and its fragile connection to our world. The imagery of blood and distance adds a deep, emotional layer. It really makes you think about the weight of existence. Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Peonieslore xo

Date: 10/2/2024 9:38:00 AM

Enjoyed this haiku paige .. very creative & such an inspiration you are, pleasure reading

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/30/2024 1:22:00 AM

Haiku on the moon is always appreciated. Great haiku.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/29/2024 4:25:00 PM

what a creative change of imagery so we'll articulated, paige...I like!

Ink Empress

Date: 9/28/2024 12:30:00 PM

A distant swerve youv captured in such eloquence in few syllables dear paige. I love always a moon poem and the imagery youv painted here is so very soulful! I especially love how you’ve personified nature, with “ moons staff wanes” creative and clever! One iv not ready anywhere but here! Pleasure always reading your work! Sending you light!

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/28/2024 7:15:00 AM

What an incredible haiku this is, dear Paige! I absolutely love the moon theme and how you've infused a melancholic touch here, that feels profound and so artistic. Impeccable imagery and so much has been painted, within just a few words..