Your Creed

Screwed Contest
Sponsor: Rob Carmack


My love you left me far out west,
   I knew our love would be a test,
      before you leave, one last request, 
        tell me baby, "why so depressed?"
           I promised you help when in need,
              I broke it out of bitter greed.

               ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

               That morning I got up and dressed,
             saying good bye, who would've guessed?
          younger days I was your conquest,
      you're older now and not impressed.
   You said our good bye was agreed,
I said, “that's fine good bye indeed."

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Through all our changes I confess,
   too many times I was so stressed,
     you seemed different from the rest,
        my sadness seemed so unexpressed.
         Mind races though I am fatigued,
            warned you were a different breed.
            ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
           
            Laying I prayed on your headrest,
          so tired, needing to decompress,
        had a feeling you were distressed,
     so now it's my turn to suppress.
   How in the world should I proceed?
To see the truth behind your creed.
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LaCharta Poem
Four stanza's with 8 syllables in each line. 
192 Syllables in all
Checked Syllable Count at:  howmanysyllables.com
Rhyme scheme: AAAABB AAAABB AAAABB AAAABB

Date Written: February 14, 2016
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Gupta Avatar
March 22, 2016 at 6:55 AM
Picturesque poetry. Congrats...
Godwin Avatar
February 15, 2016 at 11:45 AM
Me likes. Job well done LuLoo ... CayCay
Scars Avatar
February 15, 2016 at 12:11 PM
Thank you CayCay :)-luloo
Turner Avatar
February 14, 2016 at 9:52 PM
This is great!! Luloo, you usually write for contests but you went inside for this one. Well done:)
Scars Avatar
February 14, 2016 at 9:56 PM
Thank you Daniel :) *smiles* -luloo
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