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Your Country Needs You

I've read many accounts on that horrific war that was WWI ,it was supposed to end all wars.
It was trench warfare and men fought and died in hellish conditions.
It inspired me to write this fictional verse.



The posters said come fight with us and make your country proud
Went to town my friends and I to sign on the dotted line 
I remember the scenes in town, the cheering of the crowd 
They said t'will soon be over and everything will be fine.

Naive were we and believed them and everything they said 
Some basic training they gave us on how to use a gun
It did not help my friends though because now they all lie dead
To us this was a big adventure, just a bit of fun.

I was assigned to B squad, trench number forty seven
And had to stand in mud so deep it came up to my knees
Soldiers had put up a sign that said ' shortcut to heaven '
After a while my skin was itching someone said it's flea's .

Night time bombardments were the worst and my ears were ringing
Often they'd strike lucky and parts of the trench would disappear
We'd try to drown out the roars with patriotic singing
In the eyes of the boys I was with you could see their fear.

Everyday bodies were brought out and placed upon a cart
As the stretcher bearers passed we'd think thank god that's not me
A gruesome sight I witnessed were those bodies blown apart
I could not help but think that from hell those souls were free .

In November ninteen eighteen the war was finally over
We cried with tears of joy, we were finally going home 
After a few hours I saw them, the white cliffs of Dover
Tears rolled down my face and I vowed never again to roam.

Home for me was a struggle and it didn't seem quite real
At night I'd have bad nightmares' and I would wake up screaming 
Often I'd wonder if my mental scars would ever heal 
My mother she'd rush in and say " son you're only dreaming ".

It's been ten years now and the wars still raging in my head
And I often ask myself how ever did I survive
Nine friends I lost in that war and now they're forever dead 
Wars are a game of chance, whether you die or stay alive.




Written 30th September 2019.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Marcum Wong Avatar
February 2, 2020 at 11:36 PM
This is such a well written powerful and moving poem Tom. I am surprised it was not awarded a high placement. Congratulations on your HM my friend! xxoo
Cunningham Avatar
February 3, 2020 at 12:17 AM
Thank you very much Connie, I'm pleased it got a mention anyway. It was a horrific war, such a waste of life, interesting though the Spanish flu followed soon after, not surprised with all the disease from vermin and corpses. This Chinese virus is worrying too. Tom
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February 2, 2020 at 11:08 PM
A universal picture of the horror of war. Thank you Tom and congratulations.
Cunningham Avatar
February 3, 2020 at 12:12 AM
Thank you very much Sam, the first world war was horrendous, with atrocious conditions, they were told you'll be home by Christmas, didn't work out though, it dragged on for years. Tom
Ligon Avatar
January 31, 2020 at 11:05 PM
Touching poem, well thought out.
Cunningham Avatar
February 1, 2020 at 2:41 AM
Thankyou very much Juliet. Tom.
Dietrich Avatar
October 14, 2019 at 11:56 AM
I see below that you saw the same documentary I saw. I was surprised how the men in those days just "accepted it" like it was almost normal . I think they were a different breed of men from what we are seeing in recent wars.
Cunningham Avatar
October 22, 2019 at 1:27 AM
Thank you Andrea, it was a harrowing documentary really bringing home the horrors of war, and you're so right it was just accepted that men and boys would rush to sign up to fight. But you didn't see many 'desk general's) on the front line. Tom.
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October 13, 2019 at 8:30 AM
You have really captured the distress and horror of war. A lovely way to honour those you fought for us. Very well written Tom :-) x
Cunningham Avatar
October 13, 2019 at 2:37 PM
Thank you Elaine, some of those volunteers were only children, many lying about their age to join up. Tom
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October 12, 2019 at 7:31 PM
Tom, I like your inspired story of the war from a first person view of the trenches. This could've been an accounting from so many from The Sommes to Vimy Ridge. A stark reminder of the war to end all wars. -Richard
Cunningham Avatar
October 13, 2019 at 3:30 AM
Thank you Richard, one of the most horrific wars I've read about. Sadly it didn't end all wars, does mankind ever learn. Tom
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October 4, 2019 at 2:09 PM
It was a horrific war and these young men were sent as fodder - they had no chance, and yet Britain won WW1. I love this poem - my father was in the army in WW11, and told us many stories, one I'll never forget - they were bombed by their own air force in Italy - several soldiers jumped into the tank my father was driving, after the air raid, about 12 -13 people spilled out of it which normally could only take a couple of soldiers! Thank goodness my dad survived! Blessings, Jennifer.
Cunningham Avatar
October 4, 2019 at 2:14 PM
Thanks Jennifer, yes it was and you're right they were cannon fodder, thankfully your father had a lucky escape. Enjoy the weekend, good luck with the packing. Tom
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October 4, 2019 at 11:17 AM
This is a very powerful and truthful poem that portrays Post Traumatic Stress as it is for many too. Well done Tom! :)
Cunningham Avatar
October 4, 2019 at 11:57 AM
Thanks Heidi, sadly back then PTSD wasn't recognised and many were shot for cowardice. Tom
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October 3, 2019 at 4:44 PM
Such a moving piece Tom, indeed WW1 was such an horrific war that took so many innocent lifes. Hope you had a good holiday, many blessings,Gordon
Cunningham Avatar
October 4, 2019 at 9:47 AM
Thank you Gordon, the war to end all wars sadly didn't happen. Thanks , had a great holiday, have traded tee shirt for over coat and brolly now. Hope your well. Tom
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October 3, 2019 at 7:33 AM
So beautiful is your genuine rendition of the WWI profound scars that affected and ruined soldiers life till their last breath! You have, in a moving way, displayed youth aspirations and disappointment.. A great work of recognition and honour for those who fought in the name of Humanity.. rights and peace.. I salute your profound message in so captivating poetry, Tom.. A FAV.. My warmest wishes and regards. Blessings.
Cunningham Avatar
October 4, 2019 at 9:43 AM
Thank you very much Besma, yes, the awful horrors that they witness stays with them forever and sadly some never recover from that experience. Tom
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October 2, 2019 at 1:08 PM
By the time I read about the bodies being carried out, the tears were already flowing, Tom. It is so important that people write about the need to protect our young people. Sending 18-year-olds into battle just seems wrong as sometimes they don't fully understand why they are fighting. So well written that I felt like I was watching a movie. Excellent and a fave! Hugs, Carolyn
Cunningham Avatar
October 4, 2019 at 9:40 AM
Thanks Carolyn, excuse late reply, just got back from Turkey yesterday. You're right ,18 year olds have no knowledge of life, and to them war is just an adventure to them, many are shocked when they see the horror what is war. Hope you're well. Tom
Wolf Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 10:43 AM
Shades of 'All Quite on the Western Front,' except 'you' didn't die...WW1 was as horrible as they come. ~ Gershon
Cunningham Avatar
October 4, 2019 at 9:36 AM
Thanks Gershon, you're right it was sheer hell. Just back from Turkey on a night flight could sleep forever yawn. Tom
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October 2, 2019 at 8:10 AM
Tom, good job! Zowie. If evil comes to destroy us, the thinking today is to accept It? I do not mean you said that. You survived because that was God's plan. We kill way more now daily via abortion and we think nothing of them They are disposable?? Evil is accelerating and no country is safe. Not even the children in our bodies. Magnificent poem, My friend Panagiota
Cunningham Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 9:09 AM
Thanks Panagiota, when evil reared its evil head in Syria the world acted with war because you cannot talk peace with these people. Just heading off to the airport, holiday over. Tom
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October 2, 2019 at 7:20 AM
Superbly executed Tom...wars are governed by the super-elite and us, their pawns...should be the other way round...all the best my friend...^WW^ :o)
Cunningham Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 9:05 AM
Thanks W.W. So true is that, pawns in a political game. Tom
Chiri Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 3:20 AM
Great write Tom!;)
Cunningham Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 6:48 AM
Thank you Brenda. Tom
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October 2, 2019 at 12:29 AM
War is so terrible for all involved. I'm so thankful I haven't had to experience this kind of brutality. It's so sad for those who have. I pray God blesses them and you, dear Tom
Cunningham Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 6:51 AM
Thank you Regina, I only support war if it's to stop murderous thugs like ISIS slaughtering innocent people. Tom
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October 1, 2019 at 8:58 PM
Tom this is truly amazing, for you have captured the true horror of WW1 with your imagery as if you really were there. Such unimaginable suffering for mere boys and for those who did return a lifetime of horror each time they slept. A brilliant write Tom. With kindest thoughts Ann xx
Cunningham Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 12:13 AM
Thanks very much Ann, they were told it will be over by Christmas, what a shock that was, when it lasted a few years more. Heading home today, better get my brolly ready lol. Tom
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October 1, 2019 at 6:44 PM
this is excellent Tom...i cannot imagine being a young adult and either dying or watching your friends get blown apart in front of you...i have seen people with ptsd, such a shame they have to deal and are treated so poorly when they gave their lives whether they lived or died, they all gave their lives! Great job with this one!
Cunningham Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 12:10 AM
Thank you Sandra, the recruiters' knew their job, made out it was for the king and anyone not signing up was a coward. Didn't hear of them being at the front though. Tom
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October 1, 2019 at 3:22 PM
I saw the movie (documentary) about the Brits that were in that war. HOw matter of factly they entered and faced things. Then when it was all over,they were nearly totally ignored. That is just terrible how they went through all that to earn such ingratitude. Good story you wove.
Cunningham Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 12:07 AM
Thank you Andrea, was that the one that was colourised, if so I saw that too. Of course the young boys thought it was just an adventure what a shock to find hell on earth, the vermin, rotting corpses, the stench of death must have been unimaginable. Your right came home and were forgotten . It's only in recent years that their sacrifice has been recognised. Tom
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October 1, 2019 at 3:16 AM
Country, yes, your country needs you, not for your wealthy lazy living but for your doing worth......///
Cunningham Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 3:23 AM
Well said Mahtab, every country has its share of spongers. Tom
Roper Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 12:49 AM
A wonderful write, your imagery and emotion is great.
Cunningham Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 1:11 AM
Thank you very much Eve, after reading the history of WW1, I wondered what was going through their minds as they endured hell, hopefully I've managed to put some of their thoughts into this verse. Tom.
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September 30, 2019 at 4:27 PM
A brilliant write, Tom! I've read a lot about WW1 (and other wars as well) and you describe the hell of it all in vivid detail! U.S. Civil War General Sherman said "War is Hell" and he certainly knew what he was talking about! Bob
Cunningham Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 12:25 AM
Thanks very much Bob, glad you enjoyed it. General Sherman was spot on, I totally agree. And of course WW1 went below hell with the nightmare conditions, the volunteers were told you'll be home by Christmas, a big miscalculation for sure. Tom
Michael Avatar
September 30, 2019 at 3:47 PM
I will not pretend to understand this need to conquer and kill by world leaders... but they sure use innocent lives to do their bidding...we've not changed since the caveman days...Glad you came out in one piece...
Cunningham Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 12:32 AM
Thanks Arturo, I tried to make it as real as possible and have read a lot about it. It is of course a fictional write. Hope you're well. Tom
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September 30, 2019 at 3:29 PM
WOW! You are a hero Tom..service to nation is a great honor. To be able to tell your experience, as you have done, is so very special. I salute your courage. A precious write!
Cunningham Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 12:30 AM
Thank you Vijay, happy you liked it, having read stories of WWI I tried to put myself into the mind of a volunteer and his experience of it. Tom
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September 30, 2019 at 3:16 PM
Tom, I have no idea how you wrote this poem with so much emotion AND rhymed it but it is wonderful.
Cunningham Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 12:28 AM
Thank you very much Caren, I'm happy you liked it. Of course I love history and enjoy composing verse from it. Tom
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