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You Look So Tired

8:12 The machine carries me Where I need to go 8:30 Not so loud Please Not so loud 8:55 I wish for sleep Sleep is not an option Must medicate Arise 9:10 He looks upset I promised him it won't happen again He hates it when I lie 11:00 My eyes hurt They feel burdened And heavy 12:00 Chicken salad on whole wheat Lettuce, tomato, light mayo, pickle Bottle of Diet Coke 1:00 For the love of all that is good This can not be happening to me 2:30 He seemed happier to speak to me this time He seemed pleased I'll have to try harder 5:05 I'm not stopping I don't care about your cause or Why you want my money Please leave me alone 7:00 I wish for peace Peace is not an option Must medicate Down the hatch 9:15 I could stay like this forever Silent and Still 10:30 Give me your strength Angel Girl And I will give you mine 1:30 I wish for sleep Sleep is not an option Must medicate Breathe in the air

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Date: 2/27/2010 8:15:00 AM

Thought provoking. The chronicling works well. With today's stressful society, I think many will relate to your poem. Everyone strives for peace--to bad too few have it. As you can see you have mind mind working with your poem. Thank you for sharing and for stopping by to comment. Have a good weekend. Karen

L'Nass Shango

Date: 5/4/2009 6:42:00 AM

What awesome chronicle of a personal day ... this is what art is ... a gallery of the invisibles, awesome write

Denis Joe

Date: 4/9/2009 3:13:00 AM

Excellent. A wonderfully thought out narrative. The language gives a dreamlike quality to the mundane and the use of a diary technique paces the poem well. I don't think I have seen anything like this before. It is a brilliant device and executed well in this poem.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/8/2009 7:41:00 PM

How well you convey the struggle of making it through a long day when you are tired and not feeling well, Yoni.