You and I

Down in the depths of your beating heart, I have felt a change in rhythm, Twist so hard for you and I , Stranded in the midst of , The good and the bad, We the dreamers, Lost a count , Of a , Breath.
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Alhemaidy Avatar
August 3, 2024 at 7:49 AM
Lovely Nonet!
Dietrich Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 1:23 PM
I love etheree and the nonet, just one line shorter. Great metaphor and end line: missing the count of a breath.
Severo Avatar
February 26, 2024 at 9:18 PM
Beautiful poetry :)
Gondolf Avatar
January 5, 2024 at 10:18 AM
I enjoyed your nicely penned poignant Nonet, Aura.
Buhagiar Avatar
January 2, 2024 at 1:40 AM
Lovely nonet. Hope we will be friends, after my illness. A Happy New Year.
Rose  Avatar
January 1, 2024 at 4:32 AM
wow this is so so profound, love it a fav
Sharma  Avatar
December 31, 2023 at 11:48 PM
Oh my, this is such a gorgeous nonet, dear Aura.. I love the depth that it conveys, so delicately and flowing ever so gently with elegance.. "We the dreamers, lost a count of a breath".. Gosh just so amazing. Keep shining and writing, sending love & light to you :)
Cornish Avatar
December 16, 2023 at 12:25 PM
These are difficult to write without feeling stilted - I don't like these forms because of the effort required to accomplish that, but you have here, and achieved that depth without burdening your purpose with superfluous adverbs - and the ending is perfect - well done!
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