You

as I walk by you 
 you sit there
drowned in your tears

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Mahtab Bangalee

October 29, 2018 at 5:56 AM

its very brilliant haiku/// like it

Duke Beaufort

July 1, 2017 at 6:43 AM

I haven't thought about crying lately, but I used to cry all the time. Life sometimes hurts and it can be overwhelming. I see you made this up. But there are many of us STUCK with sadness and hurt. Some really bad things happen. A mourning period is permissible.

Andrea Dietrich

January 14, 2013 at 3:02 PM

sad one. I think I am starting to catch up on all your poetry posted here!!

Debbie Duncan

January 14, 2013 at 9:58 PM

Hi Andrea ;} made up .

Sara Kendrick

January 7, 2013 at 5:02 AM

Ahhh!!Sad to read..I hope that this person gets okay..Thanks for stopping by..Red-Eyed Gravy is made by pouring coffee into the pan where one has just fried country ham..Just let it cook a few minutes..I like the flavor but no one else in my immediate family does..I use instant coffee now for I don't perk coffee anymore and my instant is decaf..Sara

Skat A

November 11, 2012 at 4:40 PM

Very sad :-( ~SKAT~

Debbie Duncan

November 11, 2012 at 4:50 PM

thank you for reading,,, it's made up ;}

Harry Horsman

September 18, 2012 at 9:42 AM

like the sentiment here.!!

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 10, 2012 at 1:29 PM

A very good haiku Debbie. You can probably wipe the tears with a kiss. - Thank you for visit and comments mine poems - always welcome back. :) :) Have a wonderful new week with joy oxox love Anne-Lise :)

Debbie Guzzi

August 26, 2012 at 5:42 PM

Hi Debbie you said you love haiku, it is one of the hardest forms did you know it doesn't require capitalization? [for a name you can ;)] and that IF it has 3 lines it must have 2 parts? at its simplest the subject is line 1 & the action line 2- line 3 gives extra sensory info on what's going on IN THE MOMENT. [also a season word is often used] What you have written Deb is short free verse. It took me 3 years to be able to actually write one and mine are still very medicore!! Light & Love

Debbie Duncan

August 26, 2012 at 5:58 PM

Hi Debbie ,,,, I'm learning from those who tell me how to write one,,, I like the way you broke it down for me ;} thank you. Another site a guy tells me he likes the 5 7 5 haiku but mine was ok ;}

Joann Grisetti

July 5, 2012 at 10:57 AM

I search specifically for haiku, and am seldom disappointed. Thanks for sharing your lovely poem.

Wole Francis

September 6, 2011 at 3:41 AM

nicely written.

Poet Destroyer A

September 6, 2011 at 12:32 AM

wow! that YOU~ ((not meaning YOU)) must need a pat, or an okay.... Debbie, great haiku. CAN mean a lot... thank you for sharing.. but, now i am curious to what what the tears where about.. you have yourself a great night,..p.d.

Debbie Duncan

March 8, 2012 at 5:46 PM

Well thank you Destroyer ~ Poet ;} you write some mighty nice ones yourself ;}

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