Roy Pett Poet Rhyme

Wrong Path - 128

I ask young man
that’s if I can,
why is it fun
to use a gun

is it a thrill
to harm to kill
where is the joy
you’re just a boy,

you may feel hurt
think you are dirt
I know you’re not
why do you plot,

a life of crime
a waste of time
give up this life
no guns no knife,

I met your dad
he is not bad
full of love son
please lose that gun,

life is so short
you will get caught
then go to jail
where you will fail,

you need some help
end this I yelp
get some sense son
live, love have fun,

so my young mate
looks I’m too late
wrong path you led
so now you’re dead.

1/30/2018
Contest 128 words
Sponsored by Silent One.

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Gregory Richard Barden February 15, 2018 at 10:44 PM Sincere congratulations on your win in this VERY challenging form, Roy - blessings and congrats to you, my friend! :-) Roy Pett February 22, 2018 at 5:11 AM Thank you for your congratulations Gregory, apologies for not replying sooner this was due to a short illness nothing serious, thanks again for your support my friend. :))

Susan Ashley February 6, 2018 at 8:51 PM A powerful message Roy, expressed intimately with lovely compassion, rhythm and rhyme. I truly enjoyed your beautiful write. Congratulations on your fantastic win my friend. ~Susan Roy Pett February 7, 2018 at 6:06 AM Thank you for your very kind comment and congratulations Susan, gun and knife crime is becoming more prevalent in the UK through organised gangs which is quite alarming, thanks again for your support much appreciated. :))

Line Gauthier February 4, 2018 at 6:40 PM I much enjoyed reading your poem, Roy. Congrats on your win. Roy Pett February 5, 2018 at 5:42 AM Thank you so much Line for your congratulations, really pleased you liked this and thanks again for your support much appreciated. :))

Heidi Sands February 4, 2018 at 5:30 PM Congratulations for your win Roy :) Roy Pett February 5, 2018 at 5:39 AM Thank you so much Heidi for your congratulations, much appreciated. :))

Silent One February 4, 2018 at 4:02 PM A vey different and interesting take on the contest, I hope people listen, but they dont at that age or when they are in that environment.. Roy Pett February 5, 2018 at 5:38 AM Thank you so much for my placement in your contest, gun and knife crimes are on the increase involving younger children such a shame. Thanks again for allowing me to share my thoughts. :))

Vijay Pandit January 31, 2018 at 3:41 PM You did well Roy...sad ending, but the four word lines flow well together to send a message..best for a win. Roy Pett January 31, 2018 at 4:52 PM Thanks Vijay, I really appreciate your kind comments and encouragement. :))

FJ Thomas January 31, 2018 at 12:47 PM Such a strong message wonderfully done Roy. Roy Pett January 31, 2018 at 4:47 PM Thank you very much Shadow of the past for your very kind comment really appreciated. :))

Heidi Sands January 31, 2018 at 8:30 AM Roy, this is such a powerful poem! Very well done! Roy Pett January 31, 2018 at 4:45 PM Thank you so much Heidi, I really appreciate your support and encouragement. :))