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Wrecked: Dechnad-3

The sea, you see, we both agree - 
    he’s sure to come ashore
The tide is tied to lunacy
    he does the moon adore

You’ve seen his swells, how they arise
    sighs uttered under breath
And when she wanes, comes his demise 
    cries, mourns her cruel death

To know and yet to not accept,
    kept wracked by pitied plight -
Love’s lunacy find its precept
     wrecked in her luscious light


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Okay, I’ll keep this one - doesn’t seem like the form got in the way… This it probably just me / weird, but I found it easier to think of each stanza as a 14-syllable-per-line couplet...

The Dechnad Mor: an Irish quatrain with 8a:6b:8a:6b, 2-syllable end rhymes, cross rhymes, and alliteration

https://www.writersdigest.com/write-better-poetry/dechnad-mor-poetic-forms

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Sara Kendrick October 18, 2022 at 12:10 PM Creative work. I write something like this a good bit. I kind of like the 8,6,8,6 with only one rhyme. Way to go in writing this. Sara Jeff Kyser October 18, 2022 at 12:14 PM I like the 8/6/8/6 a lot, and also 10/8/10/8. The rule that tripped me up the most was trying to have 1:8 rhyme with 2:1 and 3:8 rhyme with 4:1. Throw in all the requirements and it becomes a bit of a puzzle indeed! Thanks for the read and comments, Sara!

Eve Roper October 17, 2022 at 8:48 PM Jeff, love the ocean. I don't know how to swim, but love the smells & the embracing breeze. Many blessings my friend Jeff Kyser October 18, 2022 at 12:15 PM Thanks, Eve, have a wonderful day! Me, I prefer the beach in the late fall - no heat!

Catie Lindsey October 17, 2022 at 2:48 PM Beautiful poem, Jeff, and the light from the moon really is mystifying. Catie ?? Jeff Kyser October 17, 2022 at 3:30 PM Thanks for reading and commenting, Catie, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Becky Forbes October 17, 2022 at 2:29 PM Is "she" - love? or the tide? Becky Forbes October 18, 2022 at 6:10 AM Thank you for being so gracious! Jeff Kyser October 18, 2022 at 5:33 AM and thank you for asking! I read so many poems here, and I'm like, I think I really like it, but I'm not sure about what was meant regarding this or that. I understand that in many ways a poem is deeply personal, but I also think we get more out of them (or of the people who wrote them) when we have a little help understanding the work. Becky Forbes October 17, 2022 at 4:38 PM Ah! got it :-) Jeff Kyser October 17, 2022 at 2:44 PM she is the moon he does adore, his love, the tide, I guess, lol. Becky Forbes October 17, 2022 at 2:29 PM Or the swell?